So I decided to check your fic out like you asked but since my attention span for reading long fics has all but disappeared I decided to read your latest chapter that was posted over a year ago.

Honestly I came in here looking for something to critique but I was happily surprised in that everything seemed good. The only thing I wasn't a fan of is when OC's start to be included too much into the story but that's really just a pet peeve of mine and doesn't reflect on the fic at all.

I thought the battle was pretty good to read and kept me invested, the dialogue was entertaining, and the fic as a whole was a nice read. Your grammar and spelling I found no problems with so really you're good man.

I wish you luck on your fic and to just continue what you're doing and you'll only get better.

Let's get the Muk out of here?! THAT'S GENIUS!

THAT PLACE WAS A GYM!?
WHAT A TWIST!

I'm thoroughly enjoying this story! I'm honestly rooting for Nightrn(how do you pronounce that name?) and Misty!

congratulations your crogunk has evoled into a crodrunk you are now free to be horny

Took a while but it was worth it. The story is real fun and one of the best in describing pokemon battles. KEEP IT UP!

This story is one word; AMAZING! Please update soon!

Great story

Thanks for the chapter. I have some questions, if you have black 2 or white 2 or any game really what's your friend code. Also what do you think of generation 6.

please update soon

i like the detail

it took me three days to finish these chapters... and i love them all! they kept me laughing and everything! also... am i sensing mistyXnightrn? i cant wait for an update!

Hey very nice chapter, its progressing very quickly and that battle was very nice, the description of strategies and attack formation, also if you are looking for other guild leaders,

David Psycio
Starter pokemon - abra (still abra no evolve)
2nd pokemon - Espeon
3rd pokemon - MetaCross
4th pokemon - Slowking
5th pokemon - Reuniclus
6th pokemon - Gothilette (i normally use mewtwo or mew but thats not real for story)

black spikey hair, pale skin, slim athletic body, tall, purple eyes (psychic)
Black jeans, purple stripe down leg of jeans, black shirt with pokeball with purple aura around it.

I just want to help give ideas for gym leaders, if u use my character ill be honored, good luck with writing :D

very nice, i enjoyed the battle and you have portrayed the characters nicely, i like this fanfiction, the battle was realistic with a 1 - 1 win ratio, and turn based attacks, which many fanfictors forget, Keep up the excellent work, and Happy writing! :D

sexydragonitecritic, everyone knows that they can have there own opinions and that if you are gonna do that then you should get the fuck outta here