I just read this story and I'm in shock. this has to be the funnest thing I've ever read. I was cracking up at Grimjow's comment to Ichigo and Uryu, but how can he say that when he just kissed Toshiro? Again, very funny yet it's also very serious and complicated, especially when it comes to the love. I can't wait to read more and see what your twisted (bad pun) mind thinks up. Write on twisted!

UPDATE! !

Since you want to feedback so badly, here it goes. I don't know about the others, but I feel that your chapters are really tiny. The first two are just miniature.

Your punctuation is also rather unclear... Every time you change the person who's speaking, you need to start a new paragraph. Sentences start with capital letters. You're missing commas and fullstops and just a whole bunch of things. I know it might sound like it's just details, but details are what make the story, and you'd be surprised how important it is for the fic to be easy to read, instead of having people pause to think what is happening because the formatting was bad.

For me, your story needs more details and smoother transitions. It is a bit too harsh at places, with actions sort of listed, rather than described. You don't really explain your character's motives and thoughts, or just mention mechanically with one sentence whether they are sad, scared or something else. Try to make it more fluid. Perhaps find a beta reader, too, and read through what you've written before you post. There are a lot of spelling mistakes that can be avoided. Personally, I'm not a fan of so many point of views. The constant switching could be mellowed out if you made the scenes longer rather than about a paragraph. Just try to slow down your brain and imagine things in more details, add gestures, emotions, doubts. You don't have to rush the chapter. People would rather have good-quality chapters than quick updates, and maybe then you'll get more reviews.

Well, you already have 5 reviews and with this, 6.
Now that Aizen knows the truth I'm curious what will happen next. Oh, and his name is Aizen XD

Update soon!

Holy crap! Please update soon! Gotta know what happens next! Poor Toshiro

This is really interesting. It would be better if you made longer chapters, though. More, please :)

Ok, ok, I'm going to review! But let me warn you that my english is not good and this damn autocorrector is not helping me either.
Let's see... well, now I don't know what to say at all, this damn autocorrector killed all my ideas... ugh it pisses me off.
Mmm... I think it was understandable, so I don't have a problem at all with it. Any grammar mistake you could have had I wasn't able to notice it, so at least I think didn't distract me while I was reading. Just hope next chapter will be longer.
Hope you update soon, bye.

you... are not the nicest person are you? course I've seen worse but still... Not that I'm complaining just pointing something out, to myself, and apparently you...

Can't be asked to sign in! (wildthoughts) i think this is awesome please update soon D: (why isn't there more people reviewing D:)

Am i seriously the only one who's reviewed? Good chap but *hisses* bad cliff hanger

NOOO! Gin can't kill Toshiro! other than that, good chapter

Good so far, please update soon :)