I personally would have shot his body with the guns on the Normandy SR2 just to be safe.

This was an amazing pleasure to read, and I am hoping/assuming that sequel will be just as good.

Man I just got hit by a weird want from a Mass Effect story, romance-wise. I would actually like to see a story where the main character has a relationship with someone who isn't on the ship. Like if Shauna survived, and this stories purpose wasn't a Kasumi romance, then that could have totally happened with this story.

I know that because of the fact that there is a sequel that he survives, but I am still worried that he might actually die.

I'm actually kind of curious what Brandon's "point value" would be if he was in the game. Like I don't know if you know but someone figured/worked out points for each person in the squad in the game, and if you don't add up to a certain amount, or average, then the team that stays behind dies. I know that Grunt, Legion, and Zaeed are up there on the points. While Tali, Mordin, and Jack are rather low on the points scale. I've got a feeling that Brandon would be somewhere in the middle, but maybe he'd be up there up there with Grunt or down there Tali.

That is the quickest someone has ever gotten me to like/love a character, and then almost immediately afterwards to cry about said character.

That hurt a suprising amount.

nice star wars cameo wit the phrase itd not a moon its a space station

This is now the second flashback chapter. If this next chapter does the same thing Im done.

As soon as I read Garrus say "Enough about my love life, what's going on between you and Kasumi?, I knew it was JL. Nice. Very nice.

Wow fantastic story, i especially liked how you started the story up, i often find the intro to many fanfiction to be a little boring or to much alike, can only say keep up the good work :)

Interesting, Detective.

This is a ******* love story! Kasumi should have died. And Brandon couldn't have survived. How many shots did he take?

I think something is wrong with me. I've been liking more Fan Fictions recently. Antiquated Love is a good story, with an OC. My mind is blown! Detective-Mason did an amazing job with this story. Our OC Brandon is by far the most interesting OC I've seen so far. But than again all I have to compare him to is a despersed mother, a tactics instructor, a dog, and a twat. So, that may change in the future.

Antiquated Love starts off with the descriptions of a gun fight, and what appears to be Brandon's dying thoughts. Wow, that's a depressing start. And then it goes to the past events leading up to that point. So the OC is guarded plot armor. Then when Shepard finds Brandon he's a drunk on Omega. Um... why? Keep reading ThatOneFanficReviewer and you'll find out. He goes on to tell Shepard about why he is where he is. With remarkably intriguing Purple Prose coming from someone who's intoxicated.

He gets himself cleaned up and meets up with the Normandy crew... Tali's on the Normandy, but Garrus isn't! What makes you think I'm this stupid Detective-Mason? Just keep reading! So, I did. And let me tell you, Detective-Mason managed to do the impossible he made me forget that Brandon is guarded by plot armor. Seriously, congratulations on making me forget about that. And the plot armor doesn't even stay with Brandon throughout the whole story, so bonus points to you there.

I did spot a tense swap, a few grammar errors, along with some missing and unnecessary punctuation errors. But, they're so far apart that they can be forgiven and besides no one on this site is free of that curse. Not even me. And let me say this: Detective-Mason you know how to do romance right! The best romance stories are slow paced and subtle and that's exactly what this romance is. And even more bonus points you managed to make your OC have flaws and have his strengths show even during his moments of weakness.

There is one thing that I've turned on my PM for because I want to know why the sneak peek for your next story is in this one when you have your next story out. Seriously, why is that sneek peek still here? I want an answer to this. Nevertheless the criticism I've given this story is only a small cut in its greatness and can still recommend Antiquated Love.

...SO. it was pointed out to me that I didn't actually um...DO my last review. So...here I am. Playing catch up, apparently. XD

Alright, so we set the way back machine to a full year before the Collectors. Which is fine, I like the idea of filling in the space, but I'm still getting the mysterious wandered vibe off Brandon, and not answering some key points: who is he, why is shep going to know him, ect. If this is between ME 1 and 2, then that's already happened, and us as the reader, arent' going to have a clue.

POV: You shift POV's here in a really awkward way between our maiden in distress and Brandon. One second it's her, next it shift back to him with no warning, nothing. Either full shift to her and stay with her for a bit, or stay with Brandon and give the scene to us from his POV.

That scene also had another "er, what?" moment for me: the shooting of the turian and batarian weapons. Which very cinematic, it's also nearly impossible for even an expert marksman to do that kind finesse shooting from the the hip, and definitely not without someone getting hurt in the process. You could get the same kind of routing of the scum by a pair a quick blows and then quick drawing the guns. As it stands it feels a bit over the top: but to each their own.

Okay, so the ship is in a LOT worse shape when he gets it than last chapter made it seem. which helps settle my original concern some.

Something tells me Shauna is a sacrificial lamb to kick our poor Brandon into the gutter. I think I would actually vote to cut the previous chapter and move it down, and lead off with this as chapter two, so it's not quite so obvious what you are going to do to our poor resident quarian. (the talimancer in me says I should beat you till you save her. The sadistic writer in me who feasts on reader tears says "MAKE IT HORRIBLE AND HEART WRENCHING. BE THE MONSTER YOU KNOW YOU CAN BE.)

I am getting off track. Sign I should wrap this up.

Biggest thing I wanna see as an improvement would be more motion/movement around your dialogoue. You don't need to have every one have something, but yours dialogue seems a bit thin on the extra details around the conversation.

But again, this is an early story. So maybe improvements already made in style. Onwards!