Reviews for Anti-Shadow Suppression Weapon: M1N470 |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Guest are you that gullible? |
![]() ![]() WARNING! Carry on reading! Or you will die, even if you only looked at the word warning! Once there was a little girl called Clarissa, she was ten-years-old and she lives in a mental hospital, because she killed her mom and dad. She got so bad she went to kill all the staff in the hospital so the More-government decided that the best idea was to get rid of her so they set up a special room to kill her, as humane as possible but it went wrong the machine they were using went wrong. And she sat there in agony for hours until she died. Now every week on the day of her death she returns to the person that read this letter, on a Monday night at 12:00 a.m. She creeps into your room and kills you slowly, by cutting you and watching you bleed to death. Now send this to ten other pictures on the site, and she will haunt someone else who doesn't. This isn't fake, apparently, if you copy and paste this to ten comments in the next ten minutes you will have the best day of your life tomorrow...,... |
![]() ![]() ![]() WARNING! Carry on reading! Or you will die, even if you only looked at the word warning! Once there was a little girl called Clarissa, she was ten-years-old and she lives in a mental hospital, because she killed her mom and dad. She got so bad she went to kill all the staff in the hospital so the More-government decided that the best idea was to get rid of her so they set up a special room to kill her, as humane as possible but it went wrong the machine they were using went wrong. And she sat there in agony for hours until she died. Now every week on the day of her death she returns to the person that read this letter, on a Monday night at 12:00 a.m. She creeps into your room and kills you slowly, by cutting you and watching you bleed to death. Now send this to ten other pictures on the site, and she will haunt someone else who doesn't. This isn't fake, apparently, if you copy and paste this to ten comments in the next ten minutes you will have the best day of your life tomorrow...,... |
![]() ![]() 5 STARS |
![]() ![]() This is an amusing story far. Definitely an interesting concept, although I have to say that your prose is very simplistic. Lots of short, simple sentences, it makes the writing feel a bit choppy. Still, it's better than trying for a more sophisticated style and just misusing words because you're reaching beyond your own skills, so I can't judge there. |
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![]() ![]() ![]() THAT OMAKE. OH MYshe's trying (and failing) not to grin like a madman* |
![]() ![]() ![]() XD god that Omake! |
![]() ![]() I want minati to be paired to mitsuru |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I wont drop it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I won't lie to you and say I'm not irritated that another of my favorite Persona stories is being rewritten, between this and Facade. However, I see your reasoning and I can only wish you the best. I'll be waiting for the updated version not-so-patiently. See you on the other side. XP By the way, if you want help Beta'ing the rewrite or anything, hit me up, I'm willing to lend my services. Take this for the road, you'll need it. *Tosses you a Soma* |
![]() ![]() You know very well it will take you forever to rewrite this story. So I'm going to come back to this on New Years 2017 and read the new chapter. Ciao mate. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well this was unexpexted but I hope that the "improved" version gets a good reception, I've been reading this story since the third update if I remember correctly and I really enjoy the way you write. Now as an opinion, I really wish that in the new version Mina gets paired with Chidori XD I think that they make an interesting couple and I wasn't satisfied with the hole harem thing |
![]() ![]() *grunts in consternation* *rereads fic* |