... Wow... That was... no words can describe how I'm feeling... I loved the detail... but at the same time I hated it... Loved the fic anyway and It's very sweet and well-written :D straight to my favourites me thinks :)

I liked the different style (with minimal dialogue) and I think the visualization of the burning feathers was really creative. All in all I thought it was very well done.

Format is good. I didn't notice any problem.
Although I miss the usual dialogue style since it is more vivid, the style you used here seems befitting. I like it since it carried the story faster to match the building suspense.
I am really amazed with how you came up with spell effect. Falling burning feathers...stayes true to the scorched pattern of wings seen whenever an angel dies.
I would love to see more!