I haven't seen a Necromorph outbreak like this since Dead Space Downfall

The Madness is already beginning

It seems the convergence of the Necromorphs has come to Equestria. You remember that Macabre version of the Twinkle Twinkle song from the Dead Space franchise. I've heard it before. Still makes me nervous just to hear it.

That Hammond guy is about to go crazy when more with that marker around. To anyone who has played the Dead Space series and watched the movies, they know what the marker is capable of. Those pathogens would drive anyone insane. This is the source of the Necromorph outbreak.

I guess this isn't the sort of Welcome they're used to. In the MLP show, new visitors wouldn't go around attacking Twilight and her friends.

Never thought they would have their own private operation in Ponyville. Isaac Clarke is in for a surprise. He's from a mature-rated universe, so the language and violence he has is strictly of a mature rated age.

Oh I can't wait for the next chapter!

Each page gets darker than the previous one. I like it.

Some constructive criticism, you could work on your scene transitions a little bit. I do like the concept of the story though.

Oh... Ow... Well, let me start with the criticisms.

Number one would be the treatment of Pinkie. I know she likes to employ offscreen teleportation a lot, and she tends to get places she doesn't. It works for a cartoon, but I'm not so sure it works in a literature piece. That might just be my opinion, though.

The second thing to irk me, albeit slightly, was the manner in which you wrote down Isaac's inventory check. I feel like a list breaks the flow of the story, when you could have written it in a format more fitting to the rest of the chapter.

Now that that's over, the things I'd like to applaud:

You seem to grasp each character to a competent level, OOC is very, very minimal if present at all;
The story seems well-paced;
Your spelling and grammar are pretty well-polished.

Oh, I love where this is going. I was slightly bothered with the occasional misspellings and malapropisms, but the story seems to be one I'm going to enjoy reading. I'd suggest finding someone to edit your stories, or proofread them at the very least.

Isaac's quip at the end had me giggling. Can't wait for the next chapter.

This story is dead isn't it.

This is actually really good and entertaining, please continue

You should add more and good job and the story

Oh Yeah. You Should Definitely Finish This Dude, It's Awesome.
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