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brilliant want more

;p

nice

amazing story, my respects!

Jy

are u not making second chapter

I was listening to the song 'booty call' by Ke$ha while reading this XD

Yeah...well I think this could have been better. Much better.

no sequel? no unplanned pregnancy?

supert history

Lemons

Good story man. Of course I really liked the hints at Sasuke wanting to bed Mikoto as well and wonder if a sequel may come out of this that somehow ends up with mom swapping and or threeways between the two boys and both respective mothers.

Still the citrus was pretty well done and I do hope you may bring another in the future. Thanks for writing:)

Great lemon. But you occasionally switched from 3rd to 1st person here and there. Loved that you kept the stockings and boots on. I look forward to seeing more in the future. And in the future it'd be great if you could have some oral and anal instead of just normal sex; using shadow clones would be great too.

Great story. Better grammar & sort out you point of views next time.