thois is dumb mrs. coulter is her mom

police?

sound like a rape or abuse story i dont like it

I'm not going to read any is ridiculous you have clearly taken a medium length story and chopped it up in a rather brutal and unashamed attempt to make it seem like a much lengthier story to new the writing itself is decent enough the chapters are not long enough for anything interesting to happen in them and the fact each chapter contains less than a quarter of a page of writing.

Very disappointing considering it seemed like a good plot.

WIERED

please please please update chapter 71 it's been a while

Dear Elliesisson96 I have a request for a story. I was wondering if you would right a story were Lyra and Mrs Coulter from the Golden Compass maybe Lyra stayed with Mrs Coulter she loves her mother and her care but Mrs Coulter could be a little bossy for Lyra and Lyra can be stubborn and Lyra is leaning to live with her mother since her mother has high expectations for Lyra to live up to and Mrs Coulter likes to know every little thing Lyra does and fusses over everything Lyra does. I hope u can find out to write this cause i'm a huge golden compass fan and a huge fan of your writing please think about it. It would be very very much appreciated thanks so much

Love it but kinda confused, is Toni Lyra's mother or is Deena?

Interesting

What will she tell Lyra

that scene must have horrified her to the core

Oh no...poor Lyra!
Pls. wirte more...quick ;D

Soooooooooo good ;)

Yep, there we go again...Not meant as a bad review.

Wonder what will happen next...