This was a fantastic read well done

I like the bonding between tsukune and mizore in this story not sure how kurumu will fit into their little future relationship though. hmm usually moka's the main girl in these stories I mean she is in the manga/anime oh well I actually like that she isn't for once not that I have anything against her.

I actually miss the rivalry that Moka has with these girls because I want to see Kurumu and Mizore fight against Moka in the story.

I don't foresee Tsukune becoming like a Batman even with training and he doesn't have the brilliant mind that makes him so dangerous I still see him as dead meat without becoming a monster in the story it was proven that even a fit Human can't survive without becoming a monster.

The question is what to do with Moka she is the main pairing for Tsukune and the reason for his desire to be stronger in the story.

The beginning of the story is almost exactly as Bruce Wayne but I will remind you even with training the monsters are stronger than any Human because Moka in her weak state can kill Tsukune with a strong punch.

Vampires in the story can actually rip out columns made of marble from the ground and bend steel with their hands they have strength in excess of 100 men and Tsukune is fit for a him but he has the strength of a very fit Human.

The Strength of monsters goes beyond anything that a Human can achieve even Kurumu can beat Tsukune with ease her illusions are almost as strong as the ones you see by the Uchiha, and her claws can cut through trees.

Very well done, I've read a lot of new stories over the past few weeks, and this one one drew me in and kept me entertained. From a new fan Kibo

Beautiful.

I really love how use quotes from other books and movie at the end of your chapters.

Is it from Malcolm Wallace from the show Braveheart?

Mizore is all like: This is mine! This is where my babies come from!

I enjoyed this while it lasted despite some problems i had woth it. Nothing horrid, simply the lack of action after building him up to be like batman. And the lack of progression of story line in favor of a shitload of character development. I like that you have tsukune as a deeply emotionally damaged person as it is much more imersive when the main hero has such a problem. I reeeeeeally like mizore in your fic and the way they romance eachother is endearing. I especially like tht he main thing is a desire to help heal him. It definately seems like a soulmate type deal with her. I also like that the two girls tsukune is paired with are both from declining races (funny how everyone only remember the yuki onna for that).

is this story kill?

So Tsukune has been broken by flames of tragic injustice, and reforged into a hero.

Make another one I like this