Lol that's a really cool story

wonderful one shot...

i love this a lotjames sirius is always my fav character and i love seeing him so confused about asking a girl to the this story a lot!x

Keep going then

I enjoyed the story itself but it was difficult to read due to some grammatical errors and formatting. Just a few suggestions: Watch your verb tenses. You go from past tense to present tense and back again. For instance, in the sentence, "Whenever James has a mad glint in his eyes, he was sure a prank was waiting to be executed," you should have "James had a mad glint" or "his is sure a prank."

Also each time someone speaks a new paragraph should be started. Not only is that proper grammar but it breaks up long, dense paragraphs that are intimidating to read and may turn away readers. After all, what would you rather read, a few long, thick paragraphs or several shorter ones?

I think you have some potential here, and I look forward to seeing it develop.

I olve this story! It made me laugh!