Fuck yeah rode!

Heya, it's Dawn again. :)

Anyway, this is a lovely beginning. I love how calm and peaceful it was at the start... then everything went to hell at the end. That escalated quickly XD

There are a few errors in this piece, like:

"I don't want to be here anymore!,"

I think you should get rid of the comma after the exclamation point. But that's probably me XD

And...

"They fleet to the dry grass..."

I think that should be flee, right?

Other than those, it's a good beginning. Definitely drew me in despite me having no idea what the fandom is.

Keep it up! :D

That was awesome! You should have see me freak out when I got the end of the last chapter and realized it was complete. I am waiting for the next season!

Really good!

Can't wait for the next season! Good Job!

This is good!

I really like this pairing, the story is good, different from what I mostly see, and I can't wait to read more :D have a nice vacation!

I really like the story. I hope you have a good vacation, and come back with more chapters! :)

Post more chapters

my, this sounds quite interesting :)