Please please update soon

Love the story. Can't wait to see what happens next. Looking forward to more.

I hope you complete the story

I don't really know what to think about this. You had a wonderful Jasper/Bella story going, but then like so many writers, you crushed the story under the weight of the plot. I bet you have lots of trouble rewriting this, or figuring out just where it should go. If this is true, I would kill the part where Angel is revealed to be Volturi and then take the story back to where Jasper scents the vampires outside his door and drop what you wrote from then on, because that's about the place you started having a lot of trouble writing and the story became jerky. Sketch out a simpler plot line, perhaps rescuing the twins and killing Victoria, nothing very intricate. Then, if you want to continue on with the Stellae plot, do so in a follow up story. I think that streamlining your plot will do wonders for the finish.

In the beginning your writing was so fluid and intriguingly in depth, it was a pure joy to read. You have an excellent gift for atmosphere and characterization. You need to work on words that sound/look the same, as you often make mistakes with them. Other than that, the lawyer's name is Jenks. You got it right, then changed it to Jenkins.

Hope this helps, and I look forward to reading more of the story, no matter which way you decide to go!

Amazing story! I love it! That's interesting about Jasper's nephew- lol though Bella's question about him being his son was a little funny. Please update again soon!

great thus far

Awesome- living this and I too am a SVM addict- although I prefer FF to the way Charlaine Harris finished the books- kinda like how you said about the Twilight book series- anyway imo Sookue and Eric were perfect for each other- she needed to trust and stop running and he needed to be open with her, but gave her end up with Sam? It's like having Belka end up with Seth or Felix makes no sense! Sorry ranting/ your story is awesome and I can't wait to read what's up next- Thank you!

This is so good and so intense.

wonder how Maddox is going to change things...

Maria is evil!

I am really enjoying this. You did a great job maturing Bella, and you didn't turn Jasper into some overbearing, controlling, dominating jackass like so many others do. Great job.

still not sure about this chapter. Maybe too many other things on my mind. I may need to reread this one.

Damn this just got a hell of a lot more complicated.

Hello,
if Jasper can not kill its creator, another few do it for him, maybe Bella will agree to do it and easily, even if mad is protected by his creations,
excellent chapter,
cathy

Update or so help me I will go absolutely crazy, don't just leave it there!