While the writing quality of your story is good in terms of spelling only, please note this part of the Content Guidelines:

"Please note FanFiction does not accept explicit content, Fiction Rating: MA, and the rating is only presented for reference."

Remove all detailed descriptions of physical interaction of sexual or violent nature in this story if you want it to remain at this site, or upload it to a site where "Fiction MA" content is allowed such as Archive Of Our Own.

You know, the fact that it is censored makes it hell to read, do you have the uncensored uploaded some where?

yes, can't wait to read more of this kind of thing

Hot! So how Yin does really nice work!

Wow... just... wow. Man is this hot. Realy like the primal agressivness you have about it. Have to say that the sensors are extremly anoying. Your writing a lemon scene, it's pointless and it's not like we see anything. Frustraing as well when we can't tell which whole you're talking about initaly so who ever is doing that please stop. At least be smart about it considering the words asskicking is used in the story it doesn't make sense to edit it when used in a different context. Finaly I have to ask what happend to the structure? This isn't near as well put together as the 1st lemonn you donated to this author. Did you have to rush or did something happen when killercroc uploaded it?