Please continue this story!

Wow, this is great! I'm a bit confused as to who drugged Tim and what they said to him, etc, but I presume you'll explain it later. Please carry on with this, it's great ]

Great idea and plot! It'd be a shame if you'd not continue it, but I unno. Your choice lol.

Annnnd one thing...your dialogue is a little off. So everytime someone says something, there should either be a comma, a period, or it could be turned into another paragraph. For example, 'I wanted to,' A distressed cry. 'I wanted to.'

Annnnd uh. One more thing. I suggest you use " instead of ' for dialogue because well uh, I dunno it's like what everybody else uses. You don't have to though. Just a suggestion. Everything else is perfect though. JayxTim possibly? Hehe my total otp. :)

YOU HAVE TO CONTINUE IT!

Cool