The fuck was Gine doing? She can sense power levels, and she just stood at the door?

Don't put random A/N in the middle of the story. We don't care what music you think is fitting for a scene. You are writing a story, not filming a movie.

Work on your English. Learn the difference between "your" and "you're".

I'm gonna read the rewrite but first to speak my thoughts on the fic. It was good, entertaining and actually had me sit through all 29 Chapters in 1 sitting. There was a few bad notes though.

The first is that there really does seem to be a Super Saiyan Bargain Sale going on. Every character that has tried it has either nearly reached or achieved it with their first attempt. Anger helps, a genuine need helps, Bardock has both when he first fought Frieza and he didn't get it. Your making it too achievable right off the bat. Even Gohan and Future Trunks struggled really bad for it, even with Super Saiyan Teachers.

Secondly, power levels. After the Buu Arc Goku and Vegeta are that powerful that even an Elite Class Saiyan with a power level of 20,000 achieving Super Saiyan 3 wouldn't even challenge their base forms. Super Saiyan 3 is a 400x Multiplier to base. SSJ is a 50x multiplier. SSJ2 is 2x SSJ. And SSJ3 is 4x SSJ2. I think we can all agree Vegeta and Goku would body a SSJ3 with a power level of 8,000,000 in base form. Characters are progressing much to quickly. Vegeta transforming to beat Frieza is more mental torture than anything, knowing that Frieza fears it. Did he need it though? No.

Broly and his mother. It is an interesting idea, neither of them are going to be relevant for a long long time until they charge up though. Broly was powerful, his mother though? You can't have her be the exact same as Broly. Pass down genes that make Broly who he is yes, but a second LSSJ? Can't happen. She NEVER would have escaped anyones notice with such rapid growth when angry.

Last 2 points are these. The first is that Goku seems to be having a jolly good time, taking it easy with his family while Vegeta seems to be working his ass off. He is being chased by psycho saiyan, has his own mother trying to manipulate and belittle him and he is constantly chasing parts for the time machine.

Some Arcs are waaaay to long. Goku, Bardock and Gine
recovering the Warp Drive shouldn't have spanned more than 3 chapters.

Goku has had it to easy, hopefully you have Vegeta send Broly's mum his way. He is stronger after all haha

12 chapters in and the story just feels like its spinning its wheels. Our main characters, Goku and Vegeta have one main goal: to get back to their own time, but chapters go by and neither of them seem to be making any serious attempts to do it. Goku just spends his time hanging around with Bardock and Gine. Instead of teaching his mom the super saiyan transformation, Vegeta is made to wait around and contribute little to the story.

It's just boring. Each chapter ends in the same place as the last. With goku and vegeta no closer to finding their way home. None of the character moments are charming or relatable enough to distract from how the story isn't really moving. While you're writing I'd try to keep in mind what your characters want and how they'd achieve that goal, not what would be cute or fun or w/e.

Also, I notice from your author notes that you keep promising more lengthy combat scenes. My advice is that the combat scenes you already have are honestly about what you need. Fight scenes, especially the fantasy fights of DBZ don't translate well into written works. To make them work requires a level of descriptive writing above what's on display here. Fighting is central to DBZ, you can't go without it but keep it short and sweet.

to go back to their own time simply use the dragonballs.
buying armor with what money?
vegeta looking exacly like the king is prob a problem aswell

"Where we come from, scouters are useless."

Comedy gold. I've been cracking up over it and repeating it in my head for at least a solid minute. Thank you for the laugh out loud ending to this chapter.

It better, you have people pinging off SSJ all the time in this even when they don't need it. Vegeta or Goku making a point against Frieza? Totally fine. Against the weaklings that are their own race? Hell no. They are just that much stronger.

Brutally Honest? Power Ups were bullshit. Vegeta and Goku are so far above them its ridiculous, to even have to turn SSJ to take care of his mother is fucked. The ease in which people are unlocking SSJ is retarded. Queen doesn't even grieve over King Vegeta? Wtf is going on. Waaay rushed.

Brutally Honest right? This is so rushed it isn't even funny. Vegeta being caught off guard by such a weakling is unreal, even more so when she was born with such a high power level yet still went under the radar. Vegeta simply taking orders from his mother and not just getting what he needs to leave. Not crushing their hopes is a disappointment aswell, any Saiyan currently on Planet Vegeta other than Goku and Vegeta couldn't beat frieza even as a SSJ... Sad truth. This had a lot of potential, but you've just kind of flung everything together.

Greetings,

Very curious as to what will happen next, but considering you're gonna rework Vegeta and Goku to after ToP I'm more interested in how your "improved" story is progressing. Hopefully, all is well! Thanks again for a great read. I shall be eagerly waiting the next chapters of the rework!

(kid) Vegeta would have been made king and she would have been queen regent

Gohan was absurdly powerful and naturally gifted and he had a very hard time getting into Super Saiyan...?

Oh, also, while a lot of people like the idea o saiyans "becoming good" just think how long it took humanity to not be absolute shit (slavery, génocide, conquest wars... Pretty much from the dawn of humanity up until now) and now add a natural tendency toward violence (even Goku for all the good hearted that he is likes to fight)