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Petunia deserved worse than that, frankly. So do Vernon and Dudley, but there's plenty of time, no?

I was pretty sure Petunia was cutting up herself and cooking it, at least that is my usual thought when I see such a horror-ish situation. Anyway, please continue, I am wondering what Dumbledore's machines(monitoring Harry) were doing when Harry had his accident.

Also, I think Dumbledore was a religious type, at least that is the only reasonable answer I could think of. He makes sure the sinners live so that they may eventually find redemption in this world because in the other they won't get that chance. And that good people dying isn't a bad thing because they are going to be rewarded in the afterlife for their good deeds.

You do a good job with this one. It may be a Gary Stu, but you don't take it to seriously, and that makes it all the better.

I will admit, it's odd to see a story that's been practically abandoned - for what, 6 years(?) - to suddenly get an update out of the blue. I read the first two chapters probably around 4-5 years ago. I think, with the experience in character building and writing that you now have gained, that this story may be worthwhile in continuing. There's a spot, somewhere in the deep recesses of my brain, that likes self-inserts. As long as it is semi-believable.

~ Eoin ~

Interesting stuff looking forward to more

I actually think this story isn't bad so far. Yes, Rihaan probably has a bad case is the Mary Sues, but what you have so far is fairly enjoyable, and definitely much better than a lot of fics out there, self-insert or not. So I definitely wouldn't mind reading more of this, if you decide to come back to it. That being said, I think I'd still rather have you working on Harry and Harley instead.

Honestly, I see where you're coming from in the authors note, but I, at least, genuinely enjoy this story. I've not read many self-inserts, but I wouldn't say that they're bad, for the reader it's just an OC, a new perspective. I hope you get back to this story someday- I love it!

I'm enjoying this one so far, thank you for sharing it.

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I see not many have reviewed your story yet. I am a big fan of the Do Over genera of fanfiction. Normally I would agree that Self Inserts can be boring, but I find your character amusing and enjoy your writing style and tone. I do hope you continue your story later on down the line, I have decided to follow it just in case.

One thing I would mention, having things start so early, it would be possible to help Luna's mom as well, although since your stated intention is to have Luna in your characters harem, I would assume you thought of this.

Some interesting concepts.

It will be interesting to see what you make of it.

after reading i have to say u really need to write more of this story soo me and other people can read this as i think its going to be a very interesting story and because of the description at the top are u paring harry and hermione togeather

To be honest, I would like to see this continued. It's well written and thought out, though if I were to insert myself into a story, I'd want it to come out as well as this also. Keep up the good work.

Until next time…

NIGHT SHADE, The Patient One