Interesting... I like how I can feel Shinjii's pain through your words. *coughcough* finish*cough* I don't see why more people didn't review... maybe it's because you never *cough* finished **
-the review meister who stalks people in their dreams

This is really good so far. I really like this and your Codename:Ashura fic it is really sweet. I hope you do continue this.

This was beautifully written, deep and soulful. I can't say that you should write more quickly;; I want the whole series up to this wonderful standard. Keep up the wonderful work. _

It's hard to review such a short chapter, but

on the technical side, it's okay, spelling, grammar, etc. A bit early to comment about accuracy to canon.

Nice way of looking at Shinji, though.