Such a great story ;)

Stumbling upon this gem was a complete accident on my part, although I do not regret it in the least. In this story you have composed a thrilling, intricate plot, likeable, human characters, and description that is truly a rarity on .

I absolutely loved your characterization of Lara. Rather than projecting the 2-dimensional sex symbol of a video game you made her a human being with a history. She had her faults and strong points, yet still managed to overcome the odds. I can only wish more authors could elevate their work to this level.

I found your other characters to be inexplicably charming-even finding that Racine was not the angelic schoolgirl we thought was a surprise. Vance as well, was wonderfully *real*. Is he an original character as well?

One thing I might suggest-have you ever considered breaking your story into chapters? I understand your motivation for putting it all on one page, but it might make it easier for readers to navigate, if they don't have the time to read it all in one sitting. You could also play with the age-old cliffhanger at the end of an installment.

All in all, an amazing accomplishment. The first story of yours I have read, though it certainly won't be the last.

WHY? WHY? Everytime I read one of your fics I can't stop, I don't stop, and I can't wait for another? WHY? DO IT AGAIN, I DON'T CARE!

Good lord, you’ve done it again. It takes all day to read one of your stories but it’s always worth it. I’m pretty sure this idea (or similar) has been done before, but you handled it so revoltingly well that I can’t complain. And I needed to step outside and get some air after that… “rupturing” incident (who’d have thought a nice girl like Lara would fight so dirty)? Also, the bit with Vance and Racine on top of the mound – how you managed to paint such a vivid picture with just a few subtle hints is beyond me. Hell, I even learned something about voodoo, so there you go…

My favourite Radders story ...

This was excellent! You have a knack for plot and framework! Keep up the good work.

Yet another rip-roaring yarn from Radley. I enjoy the way he describes Lara, better word-painting of this character is exceptionally hard to find. The attention to detail evident in this and all Radley's stories, from very specific firearm types to the ins and outs of Voudon as a belief system all add greatly to the story's overall aura of authenticity. The action sequences are very well done with a minimum of verbiage employed, one feels rather than sees the action, as happens in real life. Although Radley's style is unique, one is reminded of a melange of John Macdonald, Clive Cussler, and the slightest dash of Clark Ashton Smith.

Wow! Well done, nicely researched and well paced.

A good story long but good write more!

hey! hi, just wanted to say I liked the story, you did an excelent job and seems you made some research huh? it was very entretaining, I can notice too that it is a continuation of black flame, and that's why this Vance said she looked exactly the same, and Mr amato thought she was on her 20 right, because she fell on that pool that gave her youth, that is an Idea I really like.

but any way, the way Lara got involved in all this mess is not that satisfactory, why should racine want to get in troubles gettind Lara into all this? and really doesn't seem too intelligent of Lara chasing after a "loa" just like that with out a plan, but any way it was enjoyable, please, writte more

It's a good story although it's too damn long! It took me fifty minutes to read. But it was worth the time. It was very well researched, not just a bunch of slop piled together. It actually made sense. i like it.

I like Baron Samedi- his rough and irrepressible humour strikes a chord with my picture of him.

A few minor glitches with homonyms- par for fanfiction.

Your characterizations are exceptional, smoothly written and quite believable.

Thank you for sharing this story. It's been quite an enhoyable read.

I like the way that Lara never ends with a preposition at the end of a sentence. That's definintely "class." Heh, keep writing!

okay. i sorta get the thing with the bugs, but that's about it. all i have to say is that if you get hit by a cab in new york, good luck walking away. also, its kinda coincidental that both times she got hit, the cars were only going about 20mph. also, i don't get why you use "meters" and other british spellings, but you use "mph" shouldn't it be "kph?"

thanks for such a great story. The format you used really added to the suspence. Everytime I was in Haiti I wanted to be back in New York.

No critizism from me. I will enjoy reading another one of your stories anytime.