Wow, this is really good can't wait read more of it.

I'm very concerned about this OC of yours. He's dangling on the cliff into the chasm of Gary-stus by his fingernails.

I see you know Wise too...
Hello, your story intrigues me...it's a little rough, but overall it's got a solid structure...I will definetely read chapter 2...Keep up the good work!

Excellent Story Sir.

I definitely want to see more of Debbie and Andee, they definitely got my interest
Also, I liked when you added all the mystery in this chapter

Suspense. I love it. Write this excellent stort until you drop. -Gary

WOOOOO! sorry. Still exited for the Idea of my next chapter. anyway, this story ROCKS! Can't wait for the next chapter.

dude, this was an epic chapter. also I wonder who that new guy is? he is epic

well this was definitly worth the wait dude and i look forward to finding out who that dude with the staff is

peace out bromulus

Woo! That was unbelievable!

dude, I'm still mad You took Marcie from me, but i got a new girl now. Anyway, I don't know if you have read my story or not, but it involves Gary, too. If you have'nt read it yet, you should.

loved this chapter, in the next chapter, you could have the shadow guards tracking the whearabouts of bloodlust, and finn learns that bloodlust and flame princess already know each other, and bloodlust wants finn not to tell fp of the killings he did because he doesn't want fp to think he is evil

Ahh! Darklord Why u use cliffhangers? This story is great! I'm happy to see you're doing so well dude! *hold fist out for bump*

lol, classic prank, Bloodlust