Love this story :)

You're an excellent writer and I loved this story. Was hoping it wouldn't be too angsty, and it wasn't. But still painful because even though Loki and his family tried, he was just never going to fit in. Interesting watching the dominoes fall, you know? Or the ripples that spread parts from every action... or some other metaphor like that.

What a good ending!

AW. Loki is so much like Odin in his youth. So that's how he got Fenrir. So cute! Score a point for Thor for being a really nice brother.

Wow. Amazing job Loki!

I was Loki had better relations with his little brothers.

That's so racist. It's stupid because they all have some Jotunar blood in them. It's like Jewish racism all over again.

It's really nice to read about Loki's childhood. But how can Thor and Sif get together if Sif hates Loki's guts.

And Baldur is a dick. Stick with your brother man!

Loki is such a demanding baby.

I... Have mixed feelings... Still pissed Loki was cheated on...grrr

Oh, Loki.

I've been looking for this kind of AU for awhile, and I'm so glad that I found this one and that it's so well-done. It's really interesting to see Loki develop while knowing his heritage, and how he still ends up with a host of issues, because Asgardians are mostly privileged/prejudiced jerkfaces who just can't deal with a frost giant not being the monster they expect.

I've also enjoyed the bits of mythology and Marvel canon woven in. (550 lbs? Really? Clearly the Marvel writers did not think those numbers through.)

I feel bad for Loki and Fandral here- Loki has every right to be upset, of course, but it's still a cruel trick to pull, and I'm sure it will only come back to bite him again later.

Looking forward to reading the rest. :)

I've loved this, especially the way you played with the series and with the mythology (it's never as much fun when things are too precise, ehehe!). I love the way you write, informative without the feel of boring exposition, so I am definitely looking forward to "the real AU bits" that are promised. ;) This was so creative and really gives the characters depth. Fantastic job!

SUCH A GREAT STORY!

I honestly believe that Odin is the most evil person on Asgard. Kidnapping a baby is one thing, but telling him over and over that he is a disappointment to him is plain cruelty, especially that he is the child of the enemy. Did he try to stop the bullying? No.

Little things like these can really damage a person; especially when that person has no one to turn to. I almost always forget how much of a douchebag bully Thor used to be before he learned humility. Sif is developed, yes, but you portrayed her in the most despicable way possible in her childhood. I remember in most of the comics I read, that she had the strength and spirit of a warrior, with the grace and elegance of a lady. But then again; not all the writers of the comics had the same ideas, and neither do you.

In all this is a fantastic story with great depth and character development. You changed some things from the comics and mythology; but that what gave this story it's strongest points. It's YOUR story, and YOU did a beautiful job in bringing it to life. I look forward to your next work.

Awesomeness! Man, I can hardly wait for the sequel. But this was just absolutely fantastic and so, so well written.

Okay, where to start...

The way you incorporated the myths with the actual film here was just simply brilliant. I really, truly mean it.

What I really love about your portrayal of Loki is that he really encompasses the role of trickster god, in that he's always causing trouble, but it's never malicious, never ill-intentioned. He just likes to mess about, but you show how often it gets undone and spins out of control by circumstances Loki really can't control. He really does just come across as a child here, despite being technically fully grown.

I loved the incorporation of actual film dialog here. You kept it sparse, leaving in just the truly important parts, and used them to help bolster your own story. Now we begin to see how Loki's relationship with his family might start to unravel here.

I thought it was a stroke of genius, mixing what happens in the film with the myth involving Thrymr, and using that event as the catalyst for things starting to come undone at the seams rather than what we see happen in the film. It's really, incredibly heartbreaking, because while Loki WAS scheming and manipulating, his intentions were purely innocent in nature. He was just trying to get out of having to take his Rite, and I found myself shouting at the screen when Thor's pride and bullheadedness started to screw everything up. The same happened in the film, and it's just incredibly frustrating to watch.

I love the detail of your stories. There's just so much to take in, and it really brings the story to life and makes it so vivid. Loki's well traveled experience within all the Realms, including Jotunheim, just seems so in character for him, just fits him so well. His easy interaction with the Jotnar, how smoothly he talks to and negotiates with them is really just a treat to read. I loved the nod towards him being the god of Chaos when Thor laughed and noted how Loki loves chaotic crowds, how he really relishes in being in that type of uncontrolled environment. I loved seeing Loki's bartering skills on display again here too. You just add that trickster element to Loki's character that very few writers are able to capture. Constantly causing trouble and then being the one to get everyone out of it besides.

It really, really troubles me here though, the way Loki gets blamed for everything, and no one ever shows him any appreciation. Yes, Loki led Thor to Jotunheim, and so some of the responsibility for what happens is certainly his. But it's Thor's ill temper and his disregarding Loki, his treating Loki as less and not listening to what he says that causes all the trouble to begin with. Just like in the film, I found myself getting really pissed at Thor when he told Loki to "know his place", and completely failing to heed Loki's warnings about the foolishness of his actions.

I love how you really strive and succeed in melding Loki's mythological self with his film self by having Loki be the guy who always gets the other gods out of trouble, whether he caused it in the first place or not. His smooth talking is what saves all of them, including Sif, in that situation. That's another thing I want to mention, is I love the development of Sif here, and how she realizes that she's wronged Loki, and actively here tried to make amends for it. But we see, sadly, too little too late. The damage has been done to Loki from her maltreatment, and he's very clearly not willing to forgive her. Though we see also there's real heroism in Loki, because while he can't stand Sif, he still wasn't willing to let Thrymr take her as his bride, he wasn't about to let her get taken like that.

I about wanted to die though at the scenes between Loki and Odin, when Odin tells him he can't expect anything from him but disappointment. Just... Odin is trying to be a good father, but Christ on a crutch, does he not know how to do right by Loki. What upsets me about this is that Odin is trying to force Loki to be something and someone he's not. He's trying to force him to be like Thor, and when Loki can't and won't deliver on that expectation, Odin tells him he's disappointed in him. A child should never have to earn their parents love or acceptance, but that's exactly the position Loki's being forced into here, and it's upsetting. Odin just basically told him that he's disappointed in who Loki is and has no pride in him. That's jacked up man. Frigga's disappointment comes more from Loki having used Thor, and it's really interesting to see the relationship between these two. It only highlights further what a boy Loki still is, how young he is, that Frigga is able to discipline him that way, and Loki basically just yields to it completely. You keep in tact how Frigga is really the only one Loki's ever been entirely concerned with keeping happy, really because she's the only one who's never made him feel bad about being different.

What's scary through through all of this is the accumulation of rejection Loki has piled on him in the span of one day.

The topper is Thor at the end here, with the way he shouts at Loki and chastises him for teleporting them away from the battle on Jotenheim. It's disgusting, really. Just to put it plainly. After Loki came up with this whole plane to get Mjolnir back for him, after executing it basically to perfection, and then getting them back home safely, all Thor has is words of criticism and judgment for him. You can see how hurt Loki is by it, this sort of shocked disbelief that comes through that Thor is showing no appreciation whatsoever for everything Loki just did for him, basically saving him from his own folly, and also saving an Asgardian maiden from a terrible fate in the process. At this point, you really couldn't blame Loki for feeling like the whole world is against him and nobody appreciates or values him at all.

Thor deserved that slap from Sif, and it's truly ironic that it's her who's come to Loki's defense here, and is the one pointing out to Thor that if not for Loki, not only would she have been forced to be Thrymr's bride, but he wouldn't have gotten Mjolnir back without sacrificing some other poor girl.

I'm well and truly worried about where Loki's gone off to and what damage has been done to his psyche here. You know after all of that, he's not in a good place mentally or emotionally. Thor just shrugging off his disappearing and not being concerned with where he's gone is indicative of the problem at it's root. No one shows enough concern in Loki to ever really notice when something's really, really wrong. They just put it off to his being "different" and "weird", or whatever. It's like they don't realize the toll all of the abuse he's suffered is having on him, and that spells big trouble.

Really looking forward to seeing what happens next. This story has been truly excellent, a real pleasure to read. A huge thank you to you for sharing!

Amazing!
I'm so glad there will be more.
Is it going to be another long story or several separate stories with different plots?
Either way I want it!