Wow, cheap ending. Vaati is freed just because you couldn't think of any reasonable way for him and your OC to be together.

Welp, this was... an adventure. You had some good ideas, but they were marred by underdevelopment and the ridiculous antics of your Mary Sue protagonist. The ONLY even half developed characters are Violet, Vaati, and Shadow. Everyone else is just a set piece who exists to do things for Violet. The Eleme subplot never amounts to anything. She could have just as easily been swapped out for a projectile weapon that was about to kill Violet. We also never find out how Vaati knows of Eleme. If he was sealed away in the Four Sword for at least a hundred years, how is he familiar with a woman who was alive probably only 45 years prior?

Given that you wrote this some time ago and were a high school student at that point, I know I've been a bit harsh. I wish you luck writing your future works.

This just doesn't make sense. No man with any sliver of self-respect would throw his girl in a room with the guy she cheated with, even if the two of them now had built-in torture devices that activated with thoughts of betraying him. You're just keeping Shadow in the story because you like him, but he hasn't actually done anything important that another character couldn't do.

Wow Violet is just taking no responsibility whatsoever for her affair with Shadow. Shadow gets beaten, Shadow gets memory-wiped, Shadow gets put in the dungeon, but Violet gets to lie through her teeth and blame the whole fiasco on Shadow to the point where she begins to believe it herself.

Half the time Violet's thinking traitorous thoughts, her eyeball burns, and half the time it doesn't. That's cheap.

“I hoped I wouldn't be tortured. He wasn't that kind of guy, was he...?”
This girl must have short term memory loss.

"I wouldn't have guessed she was that far down the line." Uh... if Eleme was any closer than Violet's grandmother, she'd be Violet's mother. tf do you mean "that far down the line"? It would be more reasonable for her to be at least 4 generations away.

Omg how do you fall "heavily" pregnant, was it triplets or something? I just spilled my water down my face lmao

Also I live for Vaati being an unhealthy controlling boyfriend.

The stuff with Evesham seems so removed from everything else in the story. She's Violet's problem, not a "Zelda" problem. Why should I care about her if I'm here to read about Vaati?
Also if Violet wants to exorcise her dead ancestor, she's gonna need a camera and quick reflexes.

"My village was as quiet as ever." Yeah bih and it's also short fifty people.

Yo when Violet said "I dunno" I died. Girl it happened like 2 days ago, tf you mean you don't remember?

Vaati's mark is cool, but the heterochromia is kiiiiinda pushing the mary sue boundary. Although Violet was already a sue soooo...

I do like the new distance between Violet and Vaati. The power imbalance between them makes the danger of their relationship tangible. Now Violet has to play yesman and placate him just to keep her head, no matter how much she actually likes him. I am ready for Tamed: Concubine Adventure.

Uh anyone can use the triforce, not just the weilders or those with pure hearts (that doesn't make sense in the first place because GANON). The King uses the triforce in The Wind Waker.

Also I've seen nearly everyone forget the fact that... Shadow wasn't created by Vaati. Realistically, he should have no loyalty to Vaati. Even in the manga, which is what most people are drawing from, Shadow's only real tether is the dark mirror, which is in Vaati's palace. In FSA, similarly, the dark mirror is first stolen from the temple of darkness (Ganon's temple, which the white maiden is supposed to guard) and then put on the daek cloud, right outside the Palace of Winds. It's near Vaati, but not actually administered by him. So it doesn't make much sense for Vaati to care enough about Shadow to make a whole world for him. Besides, I'm sure even Vaati likes sunlight and flowers, especially since they've never hurt him, since... he's a picori. Being one with nature was kind of his thing, at least earlier in his life. Really not buying the whole "Vaati wants to make a dark world" thing.

Also hory fuk thus escalated quickly.

Violet keeps saying she's “in love with“ Vaati but she also said that she's only known him a week.

If it was this easy to poison Ganon, the Gerudo elders would have done so ages ago.

So Vaati is going to kill the triforce wielders in order to inherit Hylia's mandate to rule from Zelda? Okay.

Ah, the classic YA heroine dilemmaIs it REALLY bad if I cheat?" Yes ho it is.

"She came up right to my face, and shoved me. Now, I know this is a pathetic move to make, and very girlish." Yeah almost as girlish as cheating on your own boyfriend with your best friend's boyfriend.

Wait it just occurred to me that Violet is legit stealing Jasmine's man. I take back my previous reviews, I bet the girls knew what a selfish maniacal witch Violet had been all her life, and that's why they were so quick to blame her when Shadow started gossipping.
On that note, did Shadow ever receive his pumishment for that?

When Violet rants at Zelda, I thought the parentheses were Violet's inner voice finally being conscious of her crazed rage. Unfortunately I was wrongOh, so Ganon is just... alive? And not attacking the capital? Uh... what.

The guards are cartoon villains, and Violet conveniently knows a royal horse for no reason. Come on.

First it's just Green torture porn, then Shadow and Violet can't stop flirting. This is getting depressing.

1. How is the fish "delicious" if all they did was cook it over a fire? No seasoning, no deboning or degutting, Violet really didn't do anything.
2. If Jasmine is a vegetarian, why's she eating fish?
3. Who says "Jasmine how could you eat that?" and why does Raven reply if the question is for Jasmine?

"I hadn't eaten such a decent meal as this in a long while." I'm gonna go with my original assumption and say that the girls have just been eating crackers out of their cabinets this whole time lol

Also I smell a love triangle and I really hope something is wrong with my nose. Love triangles tend to be lousy.