... I dnt knw wht to say... This was a horrible story.

Such a gross tale, but so well-written. With minor grammar discrepancies & name-swaps, sure, but with a solid narrative. And yes, I too, shed a tear.
"Psychotic Sachiko. She needs to be in a mental asylum. I would encourage Yumi, too, but her fightback & retaliation shines a glimmer of hope. Some basic psychotherapy should suffice for her." Few of the running commentaries whilst reading your story. A good read for a psychological study. Thanks! Also, well done for not glorifying & redeeming the obsession masked in "love".
You got talent, kudos!

I never really questioned the strange domestic abuse lookalike this situation formed. As much as I like the pairing, sachiko seemed bat shit crazy. Interesting story though random (cause nobody kisses their friends lips goodbye) but interesting perspective.

I HATE YOU

Wow, fantastic story. At the risk of sounding sadistic, I really enjoyed this dark take on Sachiko's "infatuation" with Yumi. Well written and very interesting concept because in my mind, it is plausible. Keep up the good work.

I love the story you should do a part 2 were reactions come into place from the friends but anyway it was a good story hopefully u do a part 2 but that just mine opinion but anyway once again love it

I applaud what you have written and I truly regret not reading this earlier in my fan fiction career. The way you wove the words of hate, jealousy and hurt made it hard for me to keep my eyes from the text. This is a beautiful tale of what a number of people are sadly going through. I think your decision to make this a one-shot is correct, it allows for the story to keep its identity, which is a horrifying yet beautiful tale of how love was torn by jealousy. Please do keep it up. I will be hard-pressed to find another story of this caliber. This is easily the best story I have read.

Wow. Sachiko has literally become crazy with jealousy here. And the ironic thing is I was reading this fic while listening to a song with the words "I'm not insane, not insane". I wonder though, how is Touko, hell how is EVERYONE going to react to Yumi being an emotionless husk when she was still cheerful and fine the previous day? I'd be confused like hell if I were them. Maybe you can write a sequel about that. I can already see Yoshino shaking the hell out of Yumi, trying to bring her back to life. :)
Well great fic anyway, I love the change in perspective, showing how a true, deep love can go so horribly awry so easily. Not that I don't like the other fluffy stories, but it makes a nice change from all the tooth-achingly sweet lovey-doveyness flooding this fandom. Great job!

Jealousy is never a pretty picture. Coupled with anger and a perceived rejection can make for an explosive situation to say the least! This was painful to read, especial with these two women.

Kind Regards,

EJ Daniels

Very good writing on this one. A bit of a different view of things, but well done nonetheless. The tone of the piece was consistent and followed all the way through. I enjoyed it. Thanks.

I'm sorry, but I need to say this. It seems to me that you lack a certain grasp of the characters' personalities and the way they would be expected to behave under any circumstances. Every one of them is so OOC that the only thing recognizable is their names. I would suggest that you read Vega62a's Fake for an example of, if nothing else, cause-and-effect in character development with this particular set of characters. I hope you don't take offense, I am just trying to be constructive.

This is insane! MENN! You should categorize it as Angst and not Drama... HAHAHAHA! Very, very good! I enjoyed it very much, although it was heart breaking.. It kind of reminded me of Yumi in Forever Drifting or maybe it's just my imagination.. hahaha! :D

A job well done! xD

. . Like holy -please insert $& &-! I never read something so sad and unique at the same time. My mind was going, "Umm... what the HECK is happening here?! O.o so nicely done, and I do agree with you: Jealousy and misunderstanding could really morph anyone into something entirely different. Or in this case; losing someone who you love forever. Amazing job like always and please update on that one-shot soon :)

Hope to hear from you soon,

AsulNaRosa

D: That was really sad. I left the pain that was going on between the two.

oh god yumi... yumi is so abused.. i stop reading and then continue reading and then phew it was over. this is too much oh my god. now im crying. i need to go watch a movie after reading this. an action pack movie oh The bourne legacy film or anything that's cool and funny and action pack. i'm heading out now.