Awwwwww

Oh my gosh, this was sooooo cute!

I love that you used such an old concept. I haven't seen anyone use the old: can I borrow some sugar line, in a very long while.

Idk if Malik was just looking for an excuse to talk to Ryou. Or if he really just didn't want to pay for groceries.

But either way, I thought this was a brilliant idea. It was so short, and so simple. And yet I cannot get my mind off of it.

I thought your writing/phrasing was extremely well. I loved the charaterazation. The unique setting.

Just– just everything!

You did a splendid job on this, and I truly believe you deserve quite a bit of praise for it.

Thank you so much for sharing this. I absolutely loved it!

LOL! He came back asking for cookies!

I enjoyed it, despite the grammatical errors I found, and it would be more attractive if you redid the summary. It would be good if you beta-read this.
And Malik said 'cream puff' too much, lol. XD
Again, grammar and speaking errors is the main flaw here. Otherwise...this was good for a boredom child...

HarvestDragon