*music starts*
georgeyou wouldn't hurt your twin right?
*beat drop*
fred: run
*Music intensifies*

This was a wild ride from the start to the finish and I absolutely loved it! I was recommended this story by a fellow Fremione lover and I was tense all throughout the story! I was hooked! Loved it so much!

Wow! Hermione is having twins! Great chapter. :)

Hermione must be feeling so hurt. Great chapter!

Great chapter! I enjoyed the flashback scene. :)

You forgot about the afterbirth. No way in hell Molly or a trained healer would have forgotten about the afterbirth.

And, just so you know, a cheering section means jack all when your baby won't latch. "Encouraging her" to breast feed had better have included some tips from Molly on helping a baby latch. Because babies will root whether they want to latch or not. (And if you don't know the terms and why I'm using those words that way, you really should do a lot more research before writing about childbirth.)

I really am. I've ignored the typos, the words in the wrong order, the incorrect words, the plurals when they should be singular, the plurals in place of possessives, the possessives that don't belong, the wrong pronoun, missing letters, homophone switches, wrong words entirely ("unforgiveable curse" when you mean "unbreakable vow" at the end of this chapter - but you got it right earlier?) and a lot more to make it this far in the story.

But now you're insulting both Hermione's and Draco's intellects.

She was nearly caught at the ministry. Yaxley broke the wards on Grimmauld by grabbing her and holding on. She was captured when Harry went braindead and kept her wits about her enough to try to disguise him. She was tortured and remained mentally stable. That's all canon stuff, and only the tip of the iceberg (so much more happened in the six books before Deathly Hallows; thinking under pressure was something Hermione showed she could do starting with the devil's snare). In your story, **while pregnant** she maintained enough presence of mind to save George's life. The moment Hermione heard "Mr. Brown", she would have reacted with suspicion. Pregnancy addled mind or not, she would never have ignored her instincts the way you have her do.

Draco would never have ignored a patient being without escort if, as you stated, he should have always had one. One thing that aristocracy - and Malfoys are Wizarding aristocracy, titles or no - will always do is put peons in their place. Brandishing his wand and warning the violent rapist verbally? No. Especially not in front of Hermione, who - for all he knows - could have been sent to check on him and his operation. Additionally, if he reacts so quickly and angrily to being 'asked' to check in on Katie Bell by a nurse, there is no way he wouldn't have reacted immediately and harshly to his staff with respect to Brown.

(Side note: no way in hell would Draco ever forget who Katie Bell was. "That necklace thing"? Seriously? That's his reference to the cursed necklace he tried to have her deliver to Dumbledore in your mind?)

And I'm also not believing that Draco wouldn't have had some means to control his inmates' food. There would be house elves on staff to take care of cooking and delivering meals. There would be no opportunity for someone to alter the food in such a way - except the patient themselves. And if there are no owls, there's no way for Polyjuice to make it to a patient. They wouldn't have access to laboratories or ingredients to create their own, for obvious - and numerous - reasons.

On the note of the owls: no, Draco wouldn't have installed a Muggle telephone/intercom system. He would have immediately thought of the flying memos in the Ministry as a means of in-house communication. The memos could be charmed to speak like a howler - there's nothing preventing that feat of magic. But mixing in Muggle technology isn't something that would occur to a Pureblood. Additionally, his comment that "all the Purebloods hate" Hermione is incorrect. He might have said it, but he would have followed it up with, "Well, except blood traitors." And he would have known about her wedding and her pregnancy - despite Skeeter's hatred for Hermione, the Prophet would have covered her nuptials, especially after Voldie's defeat.

The mystery aspect to this, the 'intrigue' if you will, seems contrived. Every time you've had to introduce an aspect of it into the story, it's felt forced and unnecessary to the plot. But since this is the story that you seem to be trying to tell, it isn't unnecessary. My advice to you would be to read "The Westing Game" by Ellen Raskin. It's incredibly well-written, and Raskin perfected the art of subtlety in providing clues to the mystery throughout without it ever seeming forced or contrived. Your local library should be able to let you rent a copy of the book as it's often selected as a required reading choice for grades six through eight by schools. If that's not your cuppa, try "And Then There Were None" (its third title - I won't tell you what the first two were) by Agatha Christie. Christie is the queen of mystery, but that one is particularly spectacular in the way the hints are woven into the story events without anything ever seeming out of place.

I realize this has been finished for three and a half years, but I really do think this story could do with quite a bit of editing and a good re-write. It's an interesting tale, as far as the idea behind it - it's only that you're selling your characters (and thus your readers) short with how things unfold.

I loved this story! A marriage fic with many different twists and turns! I couldn’t get enough! Well done ️

10 minutes of CPR! he would have severe brain damage

Another great story!

is most likely. (phone cut off my last comment)

Well. it's not Ginny, Fred or George. Bill has no reason to diskike Hermione. Percy really doesn't either. That leaves Charlie or Ron. Charlie could've done it due to an imperius curse or because he though Hermione outed him maybe? And Ron is a wild card forever and always and he could've been imperio'd too. OR someone who isn't a Weasley used polyjuice potion to look like one of them in order to remain anonymous. The last one

What!? Who the hell pushed her?! This is too much. Whoever it is, they better have a damn good reason (that still won't be good enough, obvs). Like whyyyyy is she getting so much hate. Makes no damn sense.

I don't know what he's goin on about, ice cream and bacon sounds delicious. I wish my pregnancy cravings had been half as interesting lol

Omg poor Lee always gets roped into the weirdest ideas lmao