love it

YOU BETTER BLOODY UPDATE THIS3 Pretty please with a yaoi slash pairing on the top? :3 3 hehehe JALPH3 I'll love you forevers3

Well to be honest, I'm reallllly sorry if I come off a bit rude by saying this...BUT THIS WAS THE BEST FICCY EVAR! I am telling you love, I cried a bit, dunno why, but I do when I find something as lovely as this little bit here! I adore this, and you as well! Yay!

I got kinda confused while reading, but i liked it. I loved Ralph's past. :)

WOW. All I can say right now is that I'm super impressed. Wow...
I love your characterization, for a start. Ralph as the secretly insecure, emotionally needy kid (poor Ralph, I wanted to give him a hug throughout the entire story), and Jack as the seemingly-self-assured-but-actually-not-so-much "tough" boy. I really liked their interactions, too. This is one part of their dialogue that really got to me:
'So he burrowed his head into the cloak and sighed. "I can swim, Jack. But I don't like being…"
"…Thrown?"
"Yes."
"I get it."'
Just so sweet...Because I've always thought of Jack as "that kind of friend"- the guy who is so tough and outwardly confident, but sometimes knows just how to be there for people...People focus on the negatives of Jack too much, sometimes. There are pros and cons to that kid; he's a complex one.
And Simon was such a sweetie in this. Poor Si, he really did seem batty to the others.
The ending was really bittersweet and...kinda cute. :) I LOVED Jack's letter. It was so flawlessly in-character...Jack's narrative throughout the letter was just perfect, with an edge of bitterness and reality to it. Love, love, loved it. The last couple lines made me smile.:
"Probably we can go more civil and talk.'
Ralph blushed.
'Or maybe kiss some more.'" Ooooh, Jack. :)
The choir robe idea was so sweet. Amazing job. Faved, for sure. :)

Bravo! This was a great story indeed. It is well written and isn't out of character. The story flowed and kept a good pace. Ralph and Jack make the greatest OTP.

A little detail that irked me is that one paragraph says 'Ralph is now 15'. And a couple sentences later it says 'Ralph was left alone because he was 14'.