Cool chapter really liked it

I love that you did this story, I was hoping someone would do something like this since they REALLY look alike to were its almost scary. Please continue this I would love to see what happens when they go to Donavan Decker.

interesting story but the writing needs improvement

i totally thought that gray was jane's mom, well before jane's real mom came back

This story could use a lot of work, and I mean A LOT. It needs character development. It needs a plot. It needs a rising action. You really think Rita would be the one to tell her that? You think they just "found out"? How did she do that? You think she would automatically start calling her mom? I'm pretty sure they live in a house not an apartment. This story needs descriptiveness. You need to write it like a story not a play; by that I mean use quotation marks and such. Grammar and spelling is horrible. If you want help rewriting this chapter, I would be happy to help, but everything except the idea is atrocious.