fun story. i like it alot. only criticism i might have is that harry is collecting powerful artefacts at an alarming rate...i guess garry hasnt really been challenged yet is my only complaint. i do like what you have done with some of the changes. lockhart and lunas mom being the best examples. anyways i hope your muse stays strong. have an amazing day.

Was curious and maybe would have read this story, a quick check on the limes/lemons changes that. weird or wrong for a 11 year (younger/older) to fuck is besides the point others have mentioned it. hermione has a sister oké different but so unfair she get sex even her mother and so far no harry&hermione? so i skip this would gladly read it otherwise.

Ugh. I've read the rewrites... u have lost your child imagination and are less and less anything more than meaningless drabble. Before it was harry growing up and furthering. Now u already forgot your growing up time and have decided to rewrite and hide your history.. pathetic.

No. People didn't like all this random carp, because the only thing it foreshawded was the abandonment of this story. Cuz u lost the plot. And lost the characters. And there is barely any felling a more...just generalised text that should be edited down 40%

Though I once again wish for the original... so raw...so much feeling...so personable and connecting...I miss it deArly so

Weak weak weak. U r completely incompetent. Librarian could've left anytime. And Garry is weak af. Fire elemental can't deal with fire?! And fairy tale shit. No longer you are unable to compete a story. It sucks that u murdered the first Version . But at least this one was okay. I still wish for the day I find an original copy...Harry was much more personable, since you wrote from the self instead of editing/censoring.

I am REALLY enjoying reading your story. I am looking forward to see what happens next. Take care, Tammgrogan

I'll start by saying that I do like this story, and I can get through most of the lemons by imagining them as being older than they actually are, but the shit with Gabrielle that's too far she is a small child that's straight up pedo right there. anyways just has to get that of my chest but I'll keep reading the story

I'm probably way you let on this but I don't think it's a good idea you have Harry 'share' his girls because like you've said before he is very possessive and selfish. I don't think he would let anyone touch what is his. I feel he might let them flirt or a little but more to lure them into traps but not letting them go all the way. but it's your story so it's up to you. keep writing I'm really liking this series.

I may get some heavy judgments for this but I think the limes are actually pretty hot even if the characters are to young and under developed

you're doing a really good job so far keep it up, but just some advice there a some grammatical errors not a lot but some and that can distract some readers from the fir the writing the story abs keep up the gods work

it's really good I just don't see the point of giving him a powerful wand but all he wants to do is learn wandless magic kind of makes the wand pointless

this is a very good and interesting story so far

That was a good story.

Good story

This is where I stop. This is, honest to god, one of the worst fanfictions I’ve ever read. Congratulations. Here’s your Razzy.

In what fucked up universe do you consider having sex with a six-year-old acceptable? Why did you randomly shove in crossovers whenever you could? Why did Harry have to torture and kill a cat? How is he supposed to be a good protagonist? I’m not talking about a Good protagonist, I’m talking about a main character I can fucking sympathize with. Excuse me for wanting a human being instead of a fucking psychopath who blames an 11-year-old girl for getting overpowered and controlled by a Horcrux and enslaved her. Fucking incredible.

You are a genuinely sick human being and I don’t have enough insults in the book to hurl at you. Go throw yourself off a building you sunlight and air thief.