Nicely done. There are quite a few spelling and gammer mistakes, usually missing letters or using past-tense when it should be present-tense (or vise-versa), but other than that it's a good story. I actually wrote something with a similar premise for the kmeme, so of course I enjoyed the concept. My only advice would be to maybe get someone to beta for you or proofread it yourself; it can be easy to miss the little things. All in all, a good read. Thanks for sharing :)