i was completely blown away when i saw this movie i loved it so much. can't wait to read more.

Oh, I like this! It's set later than a lot of the Pit fanfics, and you're actually giving a face to their enemies. Also, Dimas saying that Bane isn't that big, is that a reference to how tall Tom Hardy actually is, or is that just an insult? ;)

Wonderful beginning, I can't wait to read more.

okay, I think that's a really good beginning! That Bane would want to protect Talia, that the others fight together against him. Very good. :)

Loved this! I think you did a great job so far. Hope to read more from you soon!

Great start! I'm really excited to read more!

Curious to see more! I was intrigued by this relationship after the movie so I'm happy to see good fanfiction being written!

Congratulations on being the first beneficiary of my new pledge to read everything I review :P

Anyways, I thought it was quite good overall, short but nice (and sincerely hope you do publish more parts). I thought you captured the feeling of darkness in the pit quite well. I liked this descriptive bit here "the open shaft tickling his senses" really made the pit seem quite grim and lacking in light. I think you got Bane's protective side of Talia bang on. Your description of fight scenes were excellent, loved them

A negative I did have is I didn't really imagine Bane calling someone a "son of a bitch" but that's just my opinion.

Your grammar and spelling are good and didn't see any problems there. Overall, excellent and I hope you post more!

Intriguing! I like how you write Young!Bane's voice. I hope to read more from you!

Nice start. I'm looking forward to see where you take this :)

I'm addicted to BanexTalia now. :) I think it's really interesting how you have a rival/enemy for Bane in the Pit, and I can't wait for more! :D