OMG THIS IS BLOODY AMAZING!

OMGGG AWWW PREGGS

they're like so cute! i love Marly and Padfoot. they're adorable

This is the best fanfic I've ever read, and I've read ALOT of fanfics. B .Ever!

NO REMMY

voldemorts a dick eh

Don't change the sad scenes. They are the ones that are the most realistic and actually make me feel for the characters...more personally, I guess.

Cheap, not cheep. Cheep is the sound a bird makes. Effect, not affect. Awesome Moody and Dumbledore character descriptions.

Altar, not alter (the marriage one), let's, it's, performing, and loads of commas. I'm harsh, I know, but grammar mistakes are my pet peeve.

My socks never match.

And don't scare me be threatening not to post! (Although I think it's done at this point. Still, scary.)

Apostrophes, apostrophes, apostrophes! As for the romantic scenes, a little funny, a little sweet, and rather gross. (I'm under 14)

Vigilance, not villigence, floo network, not floor network, lose, not loose, as not a, connection, not connected, and you're missing commas and hyphens in many places. Well done, though.

Accept, not except this time. And losing, not loosing. Sorry, but I am a grammar/spelling nut. I also think you are quite accurate about Dumbledore's view on the war and the world.

Exception, not acception. Acception is not a word.

The eyes wouldn't be red yet, they'd still be whatever color they were before Harry's fourth year. Or so I think..maybe.