Thanks for ruining my childhood

I think you should do more of these

Great story but some details, like Max being fuck by three different cocks or the organs a of 30 minutes, are just way too much

Erin... your a bitch if you don't like it get off the fucking story and stop spending your life hateing. You just mad cause you couldn't come up with it and no im not the author but you cheaky as hell some people like this. And all other haters fuck off! And author you keep writing because i reread this 7 times it wad

omfg you have problems lol, seriously though good story, i dont know if this would have been the route i might have chosen but your not me...

good story and well detailed although a little to far fetched at time but keeps you interested and makes you wanna keep reading keep up the good work

Sick and disgusting... seek help

hot! moar pweese?

keep going I love this story and I want to see what other stories you have.

Well that was certainly different. I suggest slowing down a bit and going over your work before posting though. There were quite a few spelling, punctuation, and grammar errors by the end.

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This is a creative idea I can say for sure. I'll admit it puts me off a bit cause Max is underage by so much, but it is interesting how you made things go about. That being said there are several grammatical errors that you should revise if only to improve in your own work.

A bit far-fetched but you do have imagination.

Very hot story; more please. It's ridiculous for anyone who got this far and read an M-rated story to complain about it being porn - that's the idea.

I expected something totally different when I clicked this.
This was like one of those hentai movies...So of course I love this.
And may heavens have mercy on me to never let anyone know just how hot I find this kind of things.
Thanks :D

i hate to admit that i actually found that hot... well done and very creative... it never would have crossed my mind that this pairing would be made haha... i think it's very well done, a little rushed, but nonetheless, a fun and interesting story to read

and that one review, don't take it seriously, the one who admonished you for underage sex, whatever, you stated clearly the warning and they made it all the way through the story and complained. i've had someone do that and all i did was smile and say "thanks". it makes me wonder if these flamers just read these stories just to hate. if i would have been grossed out, i would have stopped, but i was intrigued to continue reading it...

again, well done, i would love to see something else written by you. cheers!