*internally blubbering like a baby* Poor Kaioshin... D"x I absolutely love this story! You really did an awesome job capturing the grief and conflict Kaioshin must be going through after the other kais death. Its a shame he wasn't as much of a loved character in the series... All there is is me and a few of his other fans out there... When you look at the big perspective, you can really see his pain. He lost all whom he loved and/or cared for and witnessed his master's death right before his eyes all in one day. Not to mention, he had to deal with all that pain while being nearly killed by Majin Buu. Though when you think of it, though he wasn't the strongest in combat, he refused to give up on saving the universe and he continued to look for Gohan to train him.
I felt so bad for him when Buu ressurected. I can relate to his hatred towards failure and how he was extremely hard on himself for it. I feel like that quite often. :( Maybe that's why I love the little guy so much. -.-
But I digress, awesomely done fan fic. It seemed like you really put some effort into accuracy and also was able to introduce a couple new aspects and settings (for example Kaioshin going into each of the Kai's rooms). Overall, very well done and emotional piece. I was nearly crying when I read it the first time. I'm very impressed at how you were able to write such a short, yet amazing, fanfiction when some can't even do it through multiple chapters. Kudos to you FallenRose24. MAy your day be filled with Pocky and little chibi Kaioshin's. /(o)/
(-_-) (-_-) Fu (-_-) (-_-) Sion! (-_-) (-_-) HAAA! (LOL Felt like adding that after seeing it randomly while I was looking at random work done by dbz fans. XD But the person who originally made it owns it. Not me. )

oh...my...god...*drools* do it again!

*snif*

How sad...

Your Story is so great. You can even feal Kaioshins sadness by your own...

I like this story so verry much...

It is wonderfull!

Thanks for writing it!

I am glad, that there are even some people, who understand him

very good! I really like your take on the Supreme Kai's personality... not many people take the road less travelled.

OMG I love this!

You captured his sadness perfectly, but at the same time made him sound really emotionally strong. Come on, it would take a lot to carry on after what happened to him, and you put real emphasis on all his feelings towards it. I love the positive ending too. Great work!

Love it, please more fics of Supreme Kai!

Very touching and thought-provoking. You are the first I have seen to capture this aspect of our Kaioshin and you have done an exceptional job.

hey cool fic.

its funny cuz he really did kill Bibidi. they just never showed it. hope u write more! bye!

I think this is really good! The memories and nightmare Shin really evoked feelings...I fel so sorry for the little purple guy! Ever was described really well, and I REALLY loved the last lines. This was great!

~Kokiri

Such a touching and very sad story. You did such a great job. I like the way you described everything and the way you did everything through 'Shin's' POV. Keep up the great work, Shannen and who know, maybe you'll become an author and have your books published.

Poor Shin. I understand exactly what he feels like.

I love the imagery on this one! especially the first couple of lines, they actually put you there, amazing! also, the end is very powerful, which, i think, is the most impt thing! very nice, r u gonna continue? three things though: u mispelled die on "Why didn't I DIE?", watch how often u switch between third and first person, it could get a tad confusing, and "He stands there with an evil grin upon his face and licks his lips at the thought of our blood splattered upon the grassy hills of KaioShin-Kai." the word our is confusing, u should use a proper known in that case, just my opinion though. oh ya, did i forget to mention, AMAZINGLY WRITTEN!

-aNNA

Hi Shannen! OK, i FINALLY FIGURED OUT HOW TO FIND YOUR STUFF!yea! anyway, i'm really gonna try to review all your stories, but i HAD to do this one first, the one you let me read at school. I like this one a lot- it's very dramatic, not really happy, but heck, Romeo and Juilet ain't happy either and Shakespeare's my muse! Anyway great story!

Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh, it's so sad, poor shin! ...::tears::...

You know, why didn't I think of writing something like that? Very nicely put. Everyone's gotta feel sooooo sorry for out little Kaioshin _() BUt nicely written...a few minor mistakes...but trust me...you should see mine _ Hope my input helps! Take care...write more!

How could anyone not read, review, love and feel sorry for poor little Shinny? HOW!

I loved it, it was so thoughtful and deep. I loved every bit of it and might read it again... honestly I loved it that much.

Don't worry, I'm sure you'll get more rewiews... if not, you'll think up some way. I always do... I'm conniving when it comes to that.

But... if all else fails. Go East, go east to Alent. All you're answers will be revealed. You have a long journey ahead of you... (Grandia, Liete.) Cool game.