Beautiful story. I think you captured their relationship really well, as complicated as it is. I really don't know what more I can say except I really, really liked it, it just overwhelmed me this much.

THIS WAS SO GOOD. I stayed to the a whopping TWELVE THIRTY NINE AM to finish this in one sitting. Just, wow. I don't even know how to describe it. The characterization was perfect. The interactions were perfect. BLEUGH HOW DO YOU WRITE THIS GOOD.

Wow I love this, you did well with descriptions and keeping them in character. And oh, those feels! Man, this hurts me more than it should, and at the same time I have to squeal with the implied sweetness here and there

That was...just...awesome. It was so right, so in character, that it's like it happened. And from here on out, until further notice, this IS what happened, in junior high.
I loved the pacing of this, I loved the dialogue, I loved the character interactions, I love how you got all their undeveloped personalities in.
And finally, I thank you for good grammar and realistic setting.

Best hyouka story, by quite a margin.

You got the characters down perfectly. Totally nailed it. In my mind this is the perfect counterpart to what we see in the anime.

You did a great job with this! :)

I loved it!

This was the most beautifully crafted Hyouka fic the heavens will ever bestow upon the world. This was so beautiful. So freaking beautiful. Thank you for writing this.

So cute! I love mayakas characterization, especially her perceptions of the boys. Very imaginative as to how they are before the anime begins. It feels like canon to me :)

Poignant and a bit funny. The way you portrayed the whole Satoshi and Mayaka back-story was just brilliant and it was true to the canon. Also, the way you placed those one liners - those heart-wrenching one liners made all the difference. I honestly had to pause reading at some points and feel the FEELS. Words hurt you know and these words hit me straight to the heart.

This line stuck me the most though:
"She doesn't want this intimacy. She doesn't know if her heart can take it. She doesn't want to believe that she's close to him, it's just not something she wants to inflict on herself."

Oh, why? Why must your words hit me, so?

I was also captured by your title, "Flowers Without, Will", honestly it was strange and it made me ponder about it. Then you placed it at the end. It was like WHOA. Very clever.

I also loved how you portrayed the whole Oreki and Mayaka dynamic. It provided comic relief in between.

Great story. I hope to see more from you. :)

Very good story! I rarely say this, but I really don't know what is to criticize about this fic. I especially like the way you describe Mayaka's feeling for Satoshi and the psychological pain that she endures. The subtle choices of wordings fascinate me. It also sounds like a very plausible junior school life for the 3 main characters. Well done and I really hope to read more from you in the future!

OH MY GOD IBUUUUUU
YOU DON'T KNOW HOW MUCH I MISSED YOU AND YOUR WRITING

and

oh my god you wrote satoshi/mayaka aasdfhjklfk now i can die without any regreeeeeeeeet uuuhhhh

and uuuughhhh i don't know i have so many feelings for them and aaaaahhh you captured all of the things i love about them perfectly? like, how cruel satoshi is (yes, he is, he really is but nooo i can't hate him despite the fact that he ignored mayaka's feeling?), and how hopelessly in love mayaka is even though she knows satoshi won't reciprocated her feeling, and - and - oh my god let me just drown in my tears right now ;;

["Because you're my friend, Mayaka. Nothing will change that."]

OH MY GOD? uuuggghhhh this line hurts so bad. it's like, yes, satoshi cares about mayaka, but not in the same way as mayaka cares about satoshi. and - and - it won't change, even in the future. uuuhhhh i feel so sorry for mayaka

AND THE LAST PART, IT JUST -
IT BREAKS MY HEART OKAY

you break my heart.

congratulations, ibu, congratulations.

I read this like three weeks ago, but I couldn't write you a review until now.
This is the BEST satomaya fic I have read. Every single word, paragraph... EVERYTHING! Specially that ending, oh my god ;_; "One day I'll steal your heart" "See you next year" Dear god, that killed me!
It would be totally awesome if you write something more about these two.
Thanks for this awesome fic, It was amazing!

"And then, he leaves, closing the door softly. He never points out the keychain hanging from her bookshelf."
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The last sentence of this passage sounds like an afterthought, but to me, I think it's a perfect example of Satoshi's cruelty: the fact that he knows Mayaka's feelings for him but doesn't acknowledge it. Eff, he should have just kept his distance from her! Isn't he supposed to be perceptive? I want to chuck something at him for being so inconsiderate (I totally get Mayaka's small feeling of triumph when she recoiled from Satoshi's touch in an earlier passage), but I can't bring myself to hate him. Mayaka likes him too much. So she "blames herself... scolds herself... and betrays herself." Oh, Mayaka.

Lovely story, especially the ending. The writing is unexpectedly haunting, just like Hyouka can be, and tantalizingly ambiguous enough to leave some things to the reader's imagination. Mayaka's relationship with Satoshi here is heartrending, but not in a loud way. It's suitably understated, and I like it a lot. :-)

Best!

You manage to make this sound like an actual episode, the characters are so convincing. Its so convincing that some part of my mind already believes that it happened like this, of course it did.

Beautiful, heart-wrenching and heart-warming. One-sided loves are wonderfully bittersweet. I love how this is really in character. Thanks for the great read! *gives you a cookie*