Well written drama.

This is absolutely brilliant. I've always wondered, when Sherlock says that only Molly, Mycroft and some of his homeless network knew about his staying alive, if he is speaking the truth...we already know he left out his parents, and it just seems at least some of Mycroft's people would have to know...this is a brilliant way for them to find out, and Mycroft is just so spot on in this. And, "the Management"? Perfect!

What a delightful look at the edges of the fall. I loved it.

I really enjoyed this view into Mycroft's world and how they react to Sherlock's actions. Thank you for sharing!

So funny!

You are right, it could be quite a bit bigger than that. It is lovely.

I love it!

The story is very good, and you are correct. It could be quite a bit bigger. It sould, I think. First story ever I get to read about Mycroft's security! It is very interesting, as we never see that point of the things. Please update and add to it!

This is brilliant. I KNOW people who have to do the sort of work you describe here, and it is never easy. I've always thought that Mycroft would assign people the role of Sherlock surveillance as a form of torture. I think it would take longer than the gap you gave it here, but they probably would get to it. Now- the REALLY fun bit would be a second chapter covering how Moriarty got onto the roof, and what happened to his body, and the phone.

loved it

Wow. I am simply blown away by this. Just goes to show that you don't need to have a main character-centric story to have a rich and detailed and flowing piece of writing.

Detail, oh, you have so much detail, but it's never overwhelming, never overdone. The voice of the narrator is so matter-of-fact that all these details are taken as facts, as little snippets of observation from any one of the characters present, and this is absolutely wonderful. I'm stunned at how you've managed to create so many distinct personalities within a story that is just over three thousand words, and it's not forced and it's not rushed. It just WORKS.

I'd never given much thought to Mycroft's surveillance system. Well, obviously you have! You've constructed it in such a believable way, and there are so many levels to this piece, like there are stories within stories that are only mentioned but aren't told; you could probably make a very nice multi-chapter just with this idea to run on. That, my friend, is truly impressive.

Some lines I really loved:

"The lecture he gives them after the praise steals any relief; for the sins of being competent, they've moved up in the world." (Very, very Mycroft. Dry and challenging.)

"George snorts; Fred stares in awe and wonders how to work that particular metaphor into his next conversation down at the pub on quiz night." (This is what I meant when I said you developed characters so well and so quickly. Beautiful, and it made me laugh, too!)

"When he comes back, he says John has the most regular patterns he's ever seen, mostly; but the computer seems to think there's something off and refuses to use them as predictors." (THIS. Oh, this is perfect. How did you possibly manage to explain John Watson through a computer? Brilliant and spot-on.)

"You won't have a moment's free time from now until the entire empire is disassembled and all the pieces are lying at my feet." (A hint of the Mycroft's dangerous side is always great to see.)

Thank you for sharing this incredibly original piece! Looking forward to seeing more from you!

Cheers!
Kaelir