stopped reading after chapter 14 when i saw "no grafic sex in this story".. in a story about kidnapping sexslaves.. come on

Hello there, I just wanted to let you know you are an excellent writer. The structure is perfect, the plot is well put, and though I wasn't really looking I don't see any mistakes in grammar. Honestly I know how hard it is to keep the plot going, once you have it on paper it doesn't turn out the way you want it too, at least for me. Moving on I have to say, I'm terrible me at reading the summary of the stories, usually if I like the title and it has enough chapters I read it, so in retrospect this is my fault. I find criticism is crucial to every author which is why I decided to let you know what I think. I'm sorry if you do not agree; at first I was going to write to anonymously but found that to be cowardice and imply I'm ashamed of my opinion, if you do have anything to say to I want to give you the chance to do so. At first I was skeptical about this story, I'm not real fond of slavery or rape, obviously no one would be but hopefully you understand my point. I continued to read I hopes once she was "purchased" by Edward things would turn out better. Throughout the chapters leading up to the "purchase" I feel myself start to get queasy, to picture this woman getting abused and the woman around her raped repeatedly was offal. I willed myself to go on again hoping for Edwards entrance to save it all, I later find out not even the would be hero can save her for he too is bound by rules. I'm not one to put down a book and admit defeat but this one... I'm sorry to say has cut too deep. I can't continue to read, I must tell you again this wasn't written to offend you. I really hope this doesn't hurt your feelings in any way, I'm willing to give another one of your stories a try, as I said at the beginning you have amazing writing skills.

hey
oo it is getting nearer and nearer...
I hope Bella will enjoy it to some point...
please be good to both of them ;)
bye
Lil

Great story ! Can't wait to read more and see the evolution of their relationship ) Thanks you for this story !

You still have Jenny as Alice's name

They're still not comfortable with each other.

I can't understand why Edward would bother doing the job he's doing and live in such ordinary conditions. the flat seem just so basic and small. Surely people do this type of thing to live high on the hog, not live in places ordinary people with ordinary jobs live. Those people are free to suit themselves and make their own choices about any direction they wish to take their life.
He has to toe the line and watch that "misdemeanours" are not reported back to Aro all for very little recompenses it would seem. xx

thank u for the update

"Is something bothering you?"
What a question, yes something is bothering her, she is imprisoned by you.
What a weird person Edward is to be so accepting of this taking women off the street and imprisoning them and they caring about his sister and niece.
What if she was captured and give to a type that liked to have sex with kids!

Well if he wasn't making a fortune why was he working in such a dreadful profession?
What would posses a man to embarked on becoming a gunrunner only to make a meagre living where he had to budget to by a home, like any semi-professionally worker.
Any why did Aro feel the need to give him an untouched woman, or else he knew Edward wouldn't approve, if she has to be pawed and inspected all the time, it would be tantamount to polluting her.
I wish one of the women would get a gun and put a bullet through Aro's head.

She shouldn't call him Edward, she shouldn't dress sexily, he should be made to face what this is, she is giving sex to save her life, not that he would care.
She said she feels like a whore well this is how prostitutes create their "girlfriend experiences" for money not as in Bella's case to preserve her life.

It's not so bad being a slave especially with Edward as master.

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They both do seem to be adjusting.

Poor Bella. Still better Edward than James.