A sad, tragic poem, no doubt, but way too short to be posted. You should of added to this and explored more. Have Fluttershy go into certain rooms of the house. What does she feel in each? Was this the room where her father nearly beat her to death? The den where he was intoxicated on a regular basis? Was the basement where she would get her whippings, slaps, etc.? Can she feel her father in each room, breathing down on her back? You should include these thoughts. Think about them; they could really improve your writing.

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Sad poem...but a good poem never the less. Good job.