Nice

love it Ash having an Eevee awesome cannot wait to see more and I like how Ash is

w/ about charmander? w/ about squirtle? w/ about bulbasaur?
WHAT HAPPENING TO THEM?!

Great battle, clever bluff.
Good job! Keep going!

Nice

great story. keep writing. update soon. I can't wait to read more! This is getting interesting.

Wouldn't Prof. Oak know about Victini now that Ash caught her since he's able to check his Pokedex to see what Ash caught?

Great story so please update soon.

i like it capture more pokemons more variety types

This is really cool!

great story. keep writing. update soon. I can't wait to read more! This is getting interesting.

Please dont let misty stay with them, a smart ash would realise that shes a bitch thats holding him back. Ok that may be my opinion but it is so true

Well, there goes my hope that the annoying beyetch wouldn't be traveling with them.. Please tell me that Ash at least will put her in her place, and not allow her to hit him and crap..

I sure am glad you don't seem to have Misty trying to follow Ash and travel with him. I hope it stays that way.

Its a great story
I really enjoy how Brock interacts with Ash and Tini
Don't sell yourself short in the way you write details cuz its great (not absolute perfection) but really amusing and entertaining
looking forward for more reading
good luck

no, no , you did very well despite tis being rushed, though I'm alittle disapointed that Ash didn't really train his pokemon in-bettween Pewter and Cerulean city. But anyways good chapter.