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I read a few chapters and finally came to an opinion on this story. I don't want this to be taken too harshly but this is my thoughts

This story feels like its just skin and bones, no real meat to it. I see just a bit more effort in this then most so I didn't immediately dislike it but it needs a bit more filler to it to sorta bulk it up a bit. It needs more dialog, it needs a bit more detail to really make it stand. Also feels a bit rushed why not a but of denile from Ben after he finds out what the serum does that takes a few days to talk him out of; in that time Ben starts getting sick or cravings like he did when big chill was expecting? All if this could have helped out a lot for a story like this. Hope that helps

~Sparkplug

The story with Lance and Albedo is called Ben's Pet Wolf.

Those poor kids are going to be scared. :I At least it might teach them a lesion about snooping! XD Great story!

NO! yon need to do one where the kids ask their parents what it is!

...With that ending, I want you to make a sequel...To bad you won't...*pouts* Whatever!
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-Ari and Abi

I loved this story. It was well written. Great job on it.
puffin

That fabric was awesome

lol Kenny is born win. now both brothers are with Kale wow. lol the boys are so in trouble by their fathers. all four of them lol. oh wow Albedo had three kids. oh no on what they found The Knoxram serum. that is wild lol.

lol win Kevin wanted to play with is son. cute. lol Albedo having food craving same as Ben. yay that his family love Dev. awesome Kevin wants another to make Kenny. lol handcuffs are fun if done right.

oh Cameron and Albedo are together so Albedo gave in. lol now they want Gwen. oh cool they saw their future son Devlin. awesome. so cute he's shy. i wonder why he's there with Paradox.

that was smart of learning to raise a puppy or a kitten so when the time came they can raise their child or children. epic win on Siberian husky. yay she was the runt but she was a fighter like Ben and Kevin. ending so cute.

love this whole thing when everyone came into Kevin's and Ben's home. oh the ending.

love the end of this and how both of them are teasing Ben or not.

lol Dad dropped his coffee mug and the mom yelling. yay Kevin claim Ben as his own and the kid or kids. love this line from Ben's mom ("...Fine, but if it does happen, don't hesitate to break a few walls with his head." Mom finished.)