I don't usually leave reviews like this but I really wanted to enjoy this story. I've come back to this multiple times wanting to get into it but it's very hard to read. The development of thier relationship just seemed very sped through. And there is so much going on with this character. She has so many powers it's hard to keep up with and just makes the story around her kind of rediculous. Not to mention the character herself seems to have no stable ground that we can see clearly. Her character development seems random and not easy to figure out. Also Ichigo seems very out of character as well. I'm not sure if you meant for him to be like that but it kind of threw me off a bit. it's like one second It's Ichigo and then it's like he turned into a completely different character. I do thank you for being so diligent on this story though.

Juste un détail, au Japon, il est coutume de citer le nom de famille puis le prénom donc par exemple lorsqu'un japonais se présente, il ne dit pas "Ichigo Kurosaki" mais "Kurosaki Ichigo". Cela rendrait l'histoire plus crédible. Aussi, bien que j'aime cette histoire, Kat commence de plus en plus à me taper sur les nerds. J'ai l'impression de voir le personnage Sakura de Naruto. À chaque chapitre, elle pleure et s'apitoie sur elle-même et sa faiblesse puis elle promet de faire des efforts pour au final recommencer à douter d'elle à chaque difficulté. Et il y a toujours quelqu'un à chaque chapitre qui est là pour lui faire un discours sur la valorisation de soi. Au départ c'était Eita puis Ichigo puis Yoruichi puis ses esprits, etc etc. ça n'en finit jamais ! Voilà, il faut faire attention avec le personnage de Kat car elle devient rapidement détestable.

Ne prenez pas cela comme une insulte mais comme une critique constructive. Je trouve que le nom "Mangekyo" est cliché et n'est pas approprié au Hollow de Kat. Cela rappelle le Mangekyo Sharingan des Uchihas et en lisant son nom je pense à chaque fois au Sharingan. Elle devrait avoir un autre nom peut-être plus espagnol comme Catalina plutôt qu'un nom japonais.

J'ai hâte de lire votre nouvelle version de cette histoire

I like it, but this chapter in particular (ch 1) has loads of grammatical errors. I could correct them if you want.

the story is not bad, although I have a hard time reading it at times mostly because of personal preference, pls continue the good work

Please Bering Kaji back!

Yeah, no. Dropping. Eita coming out if nowhere expecting her to be buddy-buddy with him and being all-round obnoxious.

Strongly dislike Eita already.

So she already decided who she wanna be with that interesting and I miss this story so much I can’t wait to read more about it you still rock

She is in love with a guy she just literally met...
Ichijō doesn’t strike me as someone who gets in love instantly. This development makes no sense...she should first deal with the consequences of a lifetime of abuse with the help of the Kurosawa and, with time, tears and trust, she could start loving Ichigo.

Lots of inconsistencies in this chapter. As a medic, do you actually think Ishin would allow a situation of child abuse go on like that? He’d call the cops and rain he’ll over the abusers.

TEAM BYAKUYA

this story is indeed beloved. when I got the notification saying you updated i squealed, literally. glad you're back _

Please update soon! This can’t be the end!