i love this you did an amazing job on this story and i can't wait to read more of your stories

Alrighty! Story is finished and I'm all reviewed out, I think. I've got one more for you, to complete one for every chapter, and it's gonna be a somewhat long one, haha.

The story over all was a lovely flow, despite Medusa's attack in the last of the chapters - Those chapters were the only ones I had any valid problem with. A couple of chapters, as previously mentioned, could have been joined together to make longer chapters, especially with the near-identical event-related content, and more body could have been added to other chapters to compensate. However that's the extent of my complaining.

I like the character called Yuki - she's a nice, solid character who is mostly free from the Mary-Sue traits that plague most other stories, and has a nice personality - though psychologically speaking, any child of Medusa, to me wouldn't fit in well with other people at all, so Yuki being so comfortable with Soul in public is a little bit of a far stretch, but a nice stretch never the less. The grammar and spelling has been perfect, aside from two chapters in particular, however those aren't even that noticeable - I'm just picky at times, haha. Have you got a Beta reader? I reckon your work would shine wonderfully if you got a friend to proof read for you before you submit, though I understand if you don't know anyone who'd do that for you - I wouldn't be caught dead letting anyone else, even my boyfriend, read any of my fan-made publications, haha. The twist of Len having all those extra souls because of the Mifune incident is a nice one, and I found myself laughing at this quite noticeably - The dog complained at my outburst, since it's 2.00am here, and I'm apparently supposed to be in bed, according to her.

Though the ending was a little too short, it's still a nice one. And I'm glad you didn't throw in a Lemon into this story, cause really, it wouldn't be necessary, and would practically ruin your story.

I also have one question for you - Did you go for Japanese-themed names on purpose? With the Japanese language, the letter R is spoken as a combinations of the sounds in the letters R and L, therefore there is only one letter in the language - that makes Len and Ren's name's exactly the same, just written differently. I understand if this was accidental, however I thought you might like to know. It's kinda like a character in Sergent Frog, who's name is Kululu, but most people often write his name as Kururu - Both are correct, and it does depend on the translation.

But aside from that, your story has been awesome to read, especially as this is my first Soul story I've ever read - so it's a nice introduction. He was a bit out of character, but not too much where I was distracted or upset by it - in fact, in fan-made stories, I believe it's a particular form of interpretation, and it can also make things fun if done right.

I hope I've bumped your Review number up - and I hope you get more people reading and reviewing. Your writing has a lot of good potential, and I hope you continue to build up your writing style.

I also laughed at the shared title between both of our Soul Eater fan-made publications, though mine's still in progress, and I probably began it after you began yours. Ironically, mine's about Death The Kid, who I noticed was the least mentioned male character in your story, lol. Anyway, have fun, and I hope you're not too sick of my number of reviews.

Josaphina Sluik, Western Australia

There was a nice length to this chapter, though there weren't really any answers, like I was hoping. The chapter ended sweetly, though a little hatchy. The usual grammar and spelling is spot on, however.

Though this is consistent with the flow of the chapter, I'm still at a loss of what's going on. Maybe the next chapter will explain things? Fingers crossed.

This chapters interesting, and quite plot-driven, but it doesn't make proper sense with the first and last couple of paragraphs. I'm not sure about repeating the stinger twice without enough context to give an idea about it ... Sorry. Other than that, the usual is all good with the S&G

Awwww! How sweet! There's not really much else I can really say - Though Soul is the tiniest out of character, I am enjoing this immensely.

Nice - though there was a bit of a timeskip alright - I'm not so sure about that. Though the usual S&G is all in near-perfectness again - I'm liking this story quite a lot!

Nawwww! Absolutely adorable! I've never been much into SoulXOC fictions, but I'm really enjoying this! There were a few gramatical and spelling errors this time around, but it's not much of a problem. This chapter was also a nice length - Pure happiness!

Ah, the plot thickens - Rain by sounds, seems to resemble Soul. I've never read the Manga - I've only got the anime to go by, but I don't believe I've seen anyone matching the description. Is she another OC? Usual S&G is near-perfect, and flows well in reading.

Haha, this is a nice chapter, but also short - by all means, it could have been combined with chapter eleven to make a longer chapter. But I digress. The usual S&G is near-perfect, like normal.

Oh snap! Now I really feel bad for Yuki here - That could have gone so much better. Nice flow of writing and the usual s&g, though once again, I wish this could have been longer. But alas, I'll have to deal, haha. I'm enjoying this story of yours quite well.

Nice - I like this chapter moreso than the others, even though there isn't much going on with it. Though it would have been nice for there to be dialogue between the twins in this one.

Once again, no spelling or grammar errors, and the flow of the writing is nice and clean. You have a good way of portraying the difficulty Yuki is having with her decisions, and I have an easy time identifying with these thoughts.

Nice - this chapters really sweet, and I enjoyed reading the second half. Though is the word wholly really a word? I believe whole-heartedly would have been a better choice - but I'm strange that way, lol. Asside from that, Grammar and spelling is nice and clean once again.

Nice - a bit more interaction between Yuki and Soul is nice to see - I hope there's a lot more in this story.