Creo que seria bueno que cante y baile kagome, pero no cada vez que realice un ataque si no para momentos de entrenamiento, como un detalle femenino, perfecto, delicado pero letal, si deseas incluir canciones quizás para momentos en que ella se encuentre sola (siendo observada quizás)dedicando se las a alguien, creo que fue algo que caracterizó a la kagome de esta historia y seria bueno que lo mantuvieras pero sin abusar tanto de ello, igual si me permites, seria bueno que se notara el cambio progresivo en el actuar de sesshomaru, ya que sentí que si bien fue así... sentí como si derrepente de golpe se volviera amable, sería bueno ir de apoco con ello, eso puedo comentar te :3

I liked the beginning, but I just couldn't get past this chapter. Kagome is way overpowered for only being gone "training" for a month. I could see it if she had been gone for years, but no one masters any sort of weapon or martial arts skill in just a few weeks, let alone the plethora of weaponry she's apparently mastered.

Definitely would like to see your new style!

I enjoyed the story as it is but if you feel like you want to make improvements then go for it. challenge yourself and do the best you can because that is the only way to get better. I look forward to reading what you come up withHave a fantastic day

I definitely think that you should rewrite the story.i lived the original, but it needs more.

If you were to rewrite may I suggest showing Kag and Sess courting to make the story longer and not immediately jump to the future.

Hi there! While I did enjoy your story as it's written here, there is definitely room for improvement. There were bits that jumped around, and apparent confusion on some details from chapter to chapter-such as the royal family Kagome is from... Are they of the north or the east? Kikyo was brought into the story, then disappeared? Inuyasha as a plot device... Can't say I haven't done that, but it (among other things) was inconsistent. Grammar can always be improved upon, as well as repetitive word usage (duo- could also be pair, couple, two, etc.). The plot itself, while not unique, is not overdone as some others are. While the reason you give in author notes is understandable, later chapters felt rushed and somewhat forced. I do look forward to seeing the changes you make in future versions of this tale, as well as others from you.

Okay. Kagome was very Mary Sue-ish, so powerful, blah blah. And why did you Include Inuyasha beyond being a plot device on Kagome becoming strong. He was just pointless.

My dear I love all the tales when Kagome is not Kyokyo reincarnation and this one was awesomely done...

This story was wonderful and the epilogue was lovely!

Naraku is free.

They're finally courting!

Finally Sesshomaru accepts his for Kagome.

Another great chapter.

So Kagome is really from the past, interesting!