Ok so I don't wanna seem rude but seriously check you freaking spelling! It's really annoying to have to try and decide a sentence when the words are spelt wrong. I apologise if this offends you but it's just a pet peeve I have

Just saying for when you write stories in the future thought is spelt with a h not without it and maybe get someone to proofread your story before you publish it

Okay, let me change something.

I really enjoyed chapters 1-7. I love Jade West, but it was nice to see her depressed and in need of help. Sometimes life can be a senselessly cruel and her reactions were solid. Nothing too snobby, but the recurrent anger with herself was interesting.

It's how I'd react if I failed at suicide. The fact that you now have to deal with even trying at all just makes you want to curl up and hide, never to be seen and another attempt is not an option.

What if it fails again? The first time was scary enough.

Also I can see why she'd feel she isn't loved.

Though the family side isn't present on the show, the school side is. Suddenly she has this competition that won't go away and keeps pestering her for friendship rights. She has no way to avoid Vega.

She can't hang with her friends because Vega is now what of them and the others would be offended if she asked to hang out without her. Not her boyfriend, he's either in love with Vega or trying to become her other male best friend so Vega will come around. Not with school, Vega is HA's new golden girl, even Sikowitz has practically made her his favourite student.

And the Slap. Vega is there as well. Not as much, but definitely there.

I always saw Jade as someone who didn't share as a kid, and while she wouldn't show it, cares very much about the little she keeps close. So look at it this way.

Your distant cousin has come to live with you and now your parents are forcing you to share you room, toys clothes and bath time with her. She isn't exactly more intelligent, or more talented than you, but she has such a lovable personality that the gifts she does have shine so much bright and are much more appreciated.

Bullying her always backfires and your parents would only get upset if you got all whiny about it, because the girl hasn't really done anything wrong. In fact ten entire time she's been around she's been nothing, but an angel. Crying would be received as a tantrum.

What annoys you the most I the fact that she actually is an angel, even behind closed doors. Always trying to befriend you and you know that she is not really bad, and could possibly be a nice friend, but you just cant reconcile that with the fact that you now have to share everything with her.

Normally, it would be your choice and the person would have to earn the right to be your friend and share your toys, but now the person has just worked their way in and is such a darling that the world expects you to just give out your toys and an honorary badge of friendship. And the world gets angry with you door not doing so.

You're angry with her for showing up and being so perfect, with the world for forcing you to be nice to her and with yourself because you have to admit that deep down up actually do.

What's worse is that in their world, Vega is Jade's opposite. The Saviour to the Tyrant. Having also saved Jade many times and having little to no fear of Jade's wrath.

Which is why their frenemy dynamic is what it is.

Jade likes her and would normally get along with her, but feels the need to hurt her and upset her because she is in Jade's territory. She makes sure to push her away because if she spends too much time around Vega, she will lose whatever beef she has with her.

*sigh* And it was going so well...

Before chapter 17 or so... This is why I avoid stories with a lead that has gone through some form of trauma, they become this mess. Crybaby Jade is quite annoying, but that aside I have one main problem I have to point out here.

And it's not just in this story.

I don't understand how a kid who had to lose their best friend because they had to move can grow up and still hold it against their parents. No matter how bad the parents are, the fact is something life-changing just happened.

Your parent's life just became better and by extension so did yours. They can now provide more for you and themselves as well, but they have to move away to seal the deal and you want them to lose this chance for a friend.

A best friend who you will most likely lose as you grow older. You might get into a fight or join different social circles or go to different high schools or get new friends or just drift apart. Hell, what if that best friends parents have to move away later.

Now I can understand this for a child. Your world is pretty small and the things that matter in it mean a lot to you, but as a teenager. And not just your average jaded teenager, but a goth, you should know that life just isn't fair at times and somethings mean more than other things.

I mean without her father's job she would never have attended HA, the car she had would probably be less expensive and a lot of other stuff.

Now, I know that in the long run the move actually turned her family around for worse and was the first step to ruin their relationship, I can understand why she'd not like the memory of the move.

But where I have an issue is with her beef with it being focused on the loss of a best friend despite her begging and whatnot. She was a kid. That best friend has probably become someone she won't be able to stand or connect with.
Get over it.

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Love it.

I don't know how many times I have read this story - it's definitely one of my favorites...

I read it all. It was amazing, I loved it. Thank you for writing.

I can stop reading. I like Tori's decisiveness and the fact that jade is starting to realize everything, bit by bit. Your story is very exciting!

I realize that I'm about to read the 5th chapter and I haven't left a review. Here it is, your story is amazing. I can't stop reading it. I wonder about Tori. i don't know what will happen in this chapter yet, but I hope I find out what was the decision she made after walking out of the hospital that day. Anyway. Good job. Thanks for writing.

Finally, break her down and she realizes her wrongs, now she needs to get back on her feet. It's not easy but it's survival101 :)

This story has made me cry SO FREAKIN MUCH so far!
I'm starting to ship Jori more than bade...

Oh me gee this chaper made me cry sooooooo HARD!

I loved this story.

I've reread this twice in the past week and it gets me every. Single. Time. I can't stop myself from crying while reading. As someone suffering from depression and such, although it's not as severe as Jade's, it can connect with Jade on a whole new level, and I now picture Tori and Jade differently than before. I had always shipped them but after your story... wow. 3