I was wary the first time it happened and annoyed the second and third. Why the fck is the main character in such a rush to reveal the order of assassins? Why? Fcken explain or spend even a second developing it before this becomes such a major part of the story. You've given him no reason to behave like these people deserve the truth. So ffs, he shouldn't be creaming his pants at the opportunity to tell everyone. It's like you're already pretending they're a team and even worse, friends. Well I can't buy that. He doesn't know them, he doesn't have a reason to tell, so if the story is going to be consistent he shouldn't.

If this is how the story will continue developing then it would be generous to call this fanfic a functioning story. The characters need motivations and reasons for the things they do. It can't happen simply because it's being forced to. That isn't a story.

Theses only one droid who can say meatbag...

HK

Please start the sequel now that season 3 is out.

Man in Black: You've done nothing but study swordplay?
Inigo Montoya: More pursue than study lately. You see, I cannot find him... it's been twenty years now and I'm starting to lose confidence. I just work for Vizzini to pay the bills. There's not a lot of money in revenge.
Man in Black: Well I certainly hope you find him someday.
Inigo Montoya: You are ready then?
Man in Black: Whether I am or not, you've been more than fair.
Inigo Montoya: You seem a decent fellow... I hate to kill you.
Man in Black: You seem a decent fellow... I hate to die.
Inigo Montoya: Begin.

Edna: (While sketching in a notepad) It will be bold! Dramatic!
Bob: Yeah!
Edna: (Not looking up) Heroic!
Bob: Yeah. Something classic, like, like Dynaguy. Oh, he had a great look! Oh, the cape and the boots...
Edna: (Throws a wadded ball of paper at Bob's head) No capes!
Bob: Isn't that my decision?
Edna: (Looking up and glaring at him) Do you remember Thunderhead? Tall, storm powers? Nice man, good with kids.
Bob: Listen, E...
Edna: (Jumps up on a stool) November 15th of '58! All was well, another day saved, when... his cape snagged on a missile fin!
Bob: Thunderhead was not the brightest bulb...
Edna: Stratogale! April 23rd, '57! Cape caught in a jet turbine!
Bob: E, you can't generalize about these things...
Edna: (As she speaks flashbacks of these incidents flash up on the screen) Metaman, express elevator! Dynaguy, snagged on takeoff! Splashdown, sucked into a vortex! (Shouts) No capes!

Please put up the sequel when you get the chance, the story was amazing btw

Please make a sequel please. Please make also a happy ending. I love this story

Uniform? What? The entire basis of the Brotherhood’s style is hiding in plain sight. “A blade in the crowd” is what they call it. They don’t have a uniform. Just plain, common clothing. This results in them dressing similarly, but it stopped being a uniform after the first game. At best, they have a theme of dress.

Why is Derek living at the mountain? Did he get permission from his superiors to join the Young Justice League? What about his Brotherhood missions? Those won’t just go away.

5’10 is the average height of an adult male in the US. 5’11 is, by average, tall for a sixteen year-old. I wonder if Batman knows they’ve existed since long before any sort of properly recorded history existed. They were ancient when Rome was yet to be built.

I guess you're trying to add an OC Assassin's Creed character but I just feel like Drake isn't really being a part of the story. Sure he has some moments here and there but it feels more like he's a background character instead of being a main character. When writing these types of stories you have to factor in how other characters would react to your character and his actions.

The Assassin's Brotherhood now have it's origins dating back to Anicent Egypt

Can't wait for the sequel

You should have Creed using The Sword of Altair

Hi are you going to have Derek wear the Assassin's Gauntlet from Assassin's Creed Syndicate?

Look someone should adopt this and write this fantastically.