yes i too believed their lovemaking would be something as such, loving this!

I absolutely Love your writing style in this piece. You managed to hook me. I've read this piece at least three times (occasionally the mood strikes when I want to read it) so I've got it on my favorites list. Thank you for sharing!

Yup. It's me again. I'm probably becoming your number one fan. I love the way you portray Kanda. This was beautiful, enticing, and romantic. It wasn't vulgar or smutty. I treasured every single second I spent reading this. Your writing style is very engaging. Clearly, I can't get enough of it. Keep up the incredible work!

really beautiful, I love it :3

It’s hard to do this kind of PWP stuff without slipping and falling onto Mr. Cliché, bane of authors everywhere. In avoiding him, you succeed where many others have failed. I like the fever-dream style; it complements the “let’s make this hyper-intense because our beautiful lives may be snuffed out at any moment” scenario. Well done!

Normally-regularly-out of habit I skip over stories that seem to be 1,1k words each chapter. I don't know why I din't with this one though, I'm extremely-wholeheartedly-terribly pleased I didn't. Love this style. :) Keep it up, it's awesome.

At first I was really unsure about if I would like this story or not. I was thinking to myself "Kanda seems kind of...meh"...but then I kept reading, and I found that I loved it! The series of three words to describe things actually reminded me of my own writing, so it was one of the reasons I enjoyed it alot. The story also had a subtle sexuality to it. You didn't outright describe exactly what was going on, but the gist of it was gotten across. It was elegant and not vulgar. Somewhere around the middle it started to build up towards the end, and I really liked that. And I like how you start out saying about how they call each other their names, and then in the end you loop back around to it. Also, I liked how you mentioned that only te moon saw what they did, and then later compared Allen to the moon...I don't even know why that caught my attention, but it did. Overall, a most excellent story! I'll defiantly be reading more of yours!
I just remembered another thing! The story is called Pornographic...and I was saying about it bring eloquent xD well, I still think that it is! I like actually how the story is graceful and has a name like that. Oh the irony!

that was simply beautiful. im suprised no one has reviewed this yet, i mean, wow! i really loved how you made them so secretive about what they do. most fics have them as couples or something with PDA written all over it, but i could stand to read some forbidden action once in a while. .

thanks for this. i really liked it. and you did a good job with kandas point of view. ive tryed but its so hard to write in his point of view! anyway keep writing XD