What an enjoyable roller coasters ride! I really love the story~ I feel relieved at the ending and happy for Bellice altho sad for Carmen. Thank you for writing this brilliant, badass, wonderful, funny, fantastic and amazing Bella and Alice masterpiece! I

Wohooooooo I’m so happy and grateful!

Wow Bella Wow

OMFG IS THIS AN ALICE x BELLA SHIP IS SEE HEAR OvO

I know this is really late but ammonia is a chemical, pneumonia is the sickness Bella has.

Wait...if Bella's wolf turns bigger in the full moon, does that mean she was the wolf that attacked the horses or was it the other werewolf?

This would be an amazing story if not for Leah. She is such a disgusting character here and you have her as one of the main characters... ugh.

Having Leah have sex with Bella when she's out of it is totally the same thing as stopping this Kaycee girl taking advantage of her. In fact it's worse. Leah knew she was out of her mind (hence she stopped what was happening) then she decided to fuck Bella anyway to get over her own feelings. She used her like a napkin then did the same thing again when she forces Alpha Bella to accept her into her (unwanted) pack. You champion Leah in this story so much but she is no better than any abuser

I have to commend you for the way you capture emotions in your writing. The heart stopping dread of a survivor getting a glimpse of their attacker, how difficult it is(and why) to say 'I was raped', even to the people you're closest with . Dude, the moment where Regina realizes that her mom's beliefs on "what is rape is and isn't" are something Cora's been told and is just parroting it as a way to cope, brought tears to my eyes. God damn, this is one hell of a journey. But I'm with you all the way.

This was great the weasel on kates but almost made me die laughing just from the image alone. Keep up the good work.

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Herre MURDERED Me from herre then then weithout mercvfiul weords then
then dying from the Here Aliced I Can't stop it she's deasd then ATOM IZED Frtom hasllow bodies with here! then took from us/them then ATOMIZED! Bring them here then too late myself had Fasslkotr's Red eyeds Paler Com pletely Borg Drone skin was colorles gasp Then My throat was Scorching then SSSLICED From herer impaled thenbroiought here then too late wee report a gifted newborn im prinmt drain ed blod of thre four found me you are guilty m y sdctrreeam s was Felix kill thisimprin t my scream s was slienced RIPPED! B ring the accused heree yiou are dead then then blew apart then then brought here then she n eds to con trol of her thirst and bloodlust then too late trained/taught to be humasssn first hunt in both forms lucky us from NASA Bodysuits as all of all of animals then TORNFreely from pierced necks ripped bring as all of them b anished to America tore from me unable to have kids oh m y god myself was telepathic b y touch blown freely brought her
had as all of them murdered was vicious still had Falkor's red eyes creasted a Arm y un der Federation command of Starfleet Commands of the United Federation of Planets was wild I Could like her very lethal escaped from them was a fighter like Maria ATOM IZERD Tore b y ripped throast you are sentenced to death of newborns blew apart banished as all of them to America then torn by impalement then brought here made Immortal as all of them then Too late we report a wild one these on es are turned bitten b y her could drink blood studied but escaped is a fighter a advanced warrior but wiped them good they are sentenced to death by us/all then too late killed from here ASHES! alice she did to humans bitten with lethal toxic waste of her teeth ate blood forged her pack then blown freely then CRUNCHED! Punished but was unable to return nuked freely crunched from here brought as all but returned Vegetarian smashed wiped freely brought here as all of them as all of guards then ripped freely From as all of hallowed out corpses skinned alive then cremated them as all of them had a pain ful headache Shielding them she's gifted from alien venom oh m y god then to late smashed blacking outside tore from here then bring the accused then no longer as all of them then Unable to die here then freed from here brought here now too late ATOMIZED From here had them as all of them killed here as all of guards we report they are con erted bitten freely good cremate as all of them they did then were murdered as all of them myself swore Vengeance and Justice on to them b ut as all of them exploded were no longer there their young/youth were in fact freed from here bitten from here buried inburial pods as all of them were freed of undead beings as all of them met mates now unable to die out with as all of them trees were different good more as all of them merged here then us/them across Earth Alice she never dies at all but looks young is Ancient but rally Very old oh my god you can't age age Sixty-Five oh n o wee need witneses on us/them it's her yes that's me your maker your sire and asll-powerful creatoress ugh you stink like one.

That fight at the end was completely unrealistic. Suddenly she can't smell or hear anything? Forgot how to fight?

I like your sense of humour. I reckon we'd be great friends lol.

Is it bad of me to have wished it were Leah and Bella together instead? You wrote Leah to be such a cool character, I totally dig her.

When it was revealed that she was in love with Bella and when they could read each other's minds, I was so hoping they'd get together (even though I knew this was a Bellice fic). It was okay when Leah found her mate though, made it easier to accept they wouldn't get together...

But damn, the way you wrote both characters, they'd have been perfect for each other.

Overall: Not a bad fic and it definitely humoured me.

You messed hommee

Ok so I have a few things to say some good and some bad. Good first. You. Are. A. Amazing. Author! The ideas and the spelling and grammar are wonderful! You have long chapters. On to the bad. There are a few things you got wrong. First being how did Jasper join the Cullens? Alice found him in the books because she knew he was to be her mate. Their not mates so how did he come to be there? Second is the shifters should not have attacked. They could smell Bella when they found her and probaly be confused but not attack. Thats all I found. I also have a question. Could you do a sequel where all the charachters read the original twilight books? That would be funny! Audios from Winter0800