This is a good chapter. It's nice to see Sora and Roxas finally forming a friendship.

Also it's sweet how much Roxas cares for Namine by how upset it made him to hear the locals talking bad about her. I like the sentence, "She didn't object when he sat down beside her on her little cushioned stool, and he didn't move away when she leaned into him." It's a vivid image as well as shows their relationship.

The details of the painting are nice. The bit about Namine's mother is sad. I like how you tie that detail in with the painting at the end.

Nice job with this chapter.

Yaaayy update! :D I'm glad this is being continued! I can't wait to see where this goes... :)
I hope you update soon!

I'm so glad you finally updated! And this chappy doesn't dissapoint, either! Can't wait to find out more about Riku's backstory and hopefully see a bit of bonding between Roxas and Sora

Great chapter. I feel sorry for Riku and his mother. I'm curious to know more of their story.

It's nice that Sora invited Roxas to hang out with his friends. It's also a good idea that you included how he misses his friends back home when he's reminded of things they used to do.

What happened with Namine? That's an interesting cliffhanger. Good work with this chapter.

Nice chapter. It's so sweet how Namine willingly helped Roxas paint his room. It's also nice of Sora to go out of his way an invite his brother to join his friends. I'm curious about Riku's home life. Good work with this chapter, I look forward to the next.

Nice second chapter. It would be a difficult transition for Roxas. Good work with writing the breakfast scene, it's nice to see that the two very different brothers have at least something in common.

The scene with Namine is cute, especially how much Roxas admires her already. Good work with the comparison of her to an angel.

I don't blame Roxas for being angry there at the end as I would have been mad too if someone came and trashed my room while I was away. I hope they can work things out as the story progresses.

Great job with this chapter.

This is a great first chapter. I like the concept of them being twins, having never met before. You did this all while keeping them both true to their characters.

I do feel bad for Roxas, having to leave everything he knows and loves behind to move to a new location with strangers. Nice job with adding in the memory of the recent birthday celebration-it makes the move sadder that way. I hope things will work out for him and his family soon.

Wonderful work with this chapter.

this is really cool! i love the idea, it's so original! update more please :3

:) Yo!
Awesome story xD

cheers!

cmon hurry up with number 3

I love it Keep up the awesome work!

That last bit was utter brilliance.

Roxas' feelings are understandable. He's just been completely uprooted from his life. It's gonna take time for him. But good chappie. In instances like this, you captured how a regular person would feel like when life suddenly changes and no one takes the time to try to understand. I liked it!

I loved this story. You should continue writing. You write Roxas really well, however your writing as Sora could use a little bit of work. But, it was really good. :) Keep on writing. I can't wait to read the next chapter.

Waaah! If i could i would give Roxas a big hug, poor boy! you write this so well i would like to see where it goes.