Good life

Short, but, cute I like it

Awwwwww that was so cute I said that you make no more ;( but I let slide cuz cutez

It's fine. I expected it was. Thanks for writing this. God bless!

It's quite short and simple, and I think it was a little bit rushed. On the other hand, I didn't find any problematic grammar, just this: "But Gantaaaaaaaaaa!" I know that was a prolonged word, but reduce those a's, please.

When I said "...it was a little bit rushed." I mean that the events of the story were kind of fast. You had to go a little more slowly until you reach the climax of the story. Possibly, you could have filled more the story with the thoughts or feelings of the characters.

Another thing is that you must change the story rating to "K", because it has nothing harmful or negative.

Also delete the second chapter, because you don't have an story in that chapter, just an Author's Note, which is against the rules of . The readers have to understand that this is a One-Shot and it has no continuation. If the status is complete, then it's complete.

You have potential to write stories, but it's a shame that you're not active with this Fandom anymore. Try not to give up and shake your imagination to create new stories!

ThatGamerBoy.

I actually preferred it as a one-shot. Still, it was a nice story. Byeeee.

OMG YOU CONTINUED IT! thank you :)

PLEASE keep updating!

I luv it! Please please please update :D

Omg, So cute! I love this couple. Keep it up

I like this alot! I wish this happened for real, though. *sigh*

Great story, you should do more of them!

My heart hurts. I hate you ;_;

What chapter is this from? :O

Cute ;3

5/5 Stars!