Ha. Nice

ghnnh

Im reall lving is fic and i wish i commented on the other chapters

this is a god damed overlord fic! Not a Buffy. I have no idea wtf just happened. Still entertaining to read so i guess ill give you that

What I dont understand is why you are selling out of context stuff in your HP shop. Its pretty stupid. Skyrim magic is not very strong but it has amazing utility spells, HP spells can't compare in terms of healing, and some other schools of magic.

If you want to introduce a new magic system of items into HP you should at least charge enough gold per item to buy out a city.

Sigh. It was all interesting despite the bad grammar at times. Then you had to include the whole Dumbledore angle and how the Overlord never thought of that despite making contingencies for other things. That's just plot contrivance there.

personally I enjoyed this story keep up the good work

Please continue

I enjoy your writing but the way you jump around is awful the were at a party in the wizarding world then suddenly he was captured in la while I like Lara Croft as illiara it be nice to know how that happened it’s kind like your planeswalkee story to much jumping or time skipping any keep up the good work like I said I like you writing

It’s sequel net squeal

I love the story but I want you to do a book five where we see gothic take on the first and fight the avatars and kill superman and maybe fight his son or his future self
Please

I normally don't comment on the grammar of writers, but this chapter once it got to Rath's part was headache inducing. With all the missing words and run-on sentences... I almost didn't want to continue reading. I hope one day you'll try to fix these errors as I would love to read it again.

Did you forget you had the philosophers stone? Why do you not just turn a boulder into gold then smelt it down to bars? Or did I miss something?

The world where Winifred Burkle was trapped is called Pylea, not Pleya.

So where is the rest of this?