Sorry this took a couple days to get to you, but here I am! So this chapter like you mentioned to me in one of our many PMs does have the constant headbutting between Dameon and Michka. I believe you did an excellent job between the two of them with their banters as well as the frustration they felt with each other. The way Michka got furious when Dameon went through her stuff and found her badge was good, although I feel that she should have given Dameon a chance to explain why he did what he did. Another thing I noticed is that I felt Dameon was a little too compliant with Michka throughout this chapter, like when he let her go after she told him to take his hand off of her and the other being when he sent Kenta to go talk to Michka about what they wanted with her to build the underground tunnels. I wrote him to be a no BS kind of guy.

Now we see Michka's softer side through Kate as well as he Pokémon in this chapter which is good because up to this point she's been pretty rough with the group so that's how they see her for the most part. I'm curious if Kate is that girl that is supposed to be that kid that looks up to Michka and Dameon as parental figures or if that was a different character that has yet to be introduced. Speaking of Kate, it seems as though Kenta has a thing for her and in which case is not being so received by her as she goes to Michka to get away from him which is funny.

So to wrap the chapter up, Michka completed a good amount of the tunnels, but it seems she'll be out of gas to fight this new Ice Type Special. The way I look at this, it'll either be Kenta or Guardian to fight against them since that Ice type would have the advantage over Dameon, Rein, and Michka. Unless Kate somehow gets there to help and fights back, otherwise Kenta will probably only be able to hold off the Ice type. I am guessing Guardian is a poison type because he wears a gas mask. So this will be interesting to see how it turns out.

Constructive Critique:

I believe this chapter was really good. There were some points where the word didn't match the correct tense and I believe you could have omitted some of words in a few of your sentences. I would copy and paste examples, but for some reason the highlight feature won't let me do it. Anyway, this was a great chapter to see after a while and I am eager to see what comes next.

-CaptainPrice

Another great chapter! Can't wait to see how this turns out!

Nice chapter. I wonder if Milo is really trustworthy or not? I'm also curious to see what the villains next move will be and just what they are waiting for. Good luck.

Nicely done. And here I was afraid that this story would be left unfinished. I'm glad that's not the case, this is a great story. You did Al excellently, better than I could have done. Keep up the good work, I look forward to reading the next chapter.

Hey, you updated! It was great to see an update after such a long time. I find it funny that I actually ended up updating almost an hour after you did with your chapter here. Anyway, let's get to it!

So we finally go back to Milo, Dane, Cura and this new guy Alphonse. We get more character insight on Milo who is quite fit, especially if he can do three sets of sixty-five pull ups within four hours. We see that Milo is a bit of a cocky smartass around Alphonse and always has some sort of witty retort to give back, which provided some decent comic relief from the high tensions last chapter.

We also go back to Crowley and see his report about the Type-S to his superior who I am curious to learn about as I thought that General that was mentioned in like chapter two or three was the main bad guy, but I guess this guy is the true antagonist. I could not help but get a Dr. Evil kind of vibe with the Zorua cub in his lap and the guy petting it as he talked with Crowley. And we see that board that has the checks, Xs and circles which was similar to my chapter in my story which marked where the hybrids were which only leaves me to suspect that that is what it represents in your story here.

Finally we are introduced to this new character Westley who works with Crowley and has apparently adopted some of James' characteristics with being sarcastic and acting like a troll towards Crowley. However I am curious about what he was getting at with them being from two different worlds which will obviously be answered at a future date. Overall, this was an interesting chapter and it was nice to see that it was a little longer than some of your previous ones.

Constructive Criticism:

The biggest thing I saw with this chapter is that you were writing in present tense with a third person narrative when it should be past tense. You did not do it throughout the whole chapter which is good, but you did have some instances where the tense was incorrect and it was a little distracting. Present tense is a form of first person narration, but other than that, I noticed that you were missing a few words in a sentence. Just make sure to do a solid read through and read aloud to help catch those small errors and you'll be golden. Keep up the solid work. I look forward to seeing what you planned out next.

-CaptainPrice

Amazing chapter! This story is going along splendidly!

Really like what you have so far. The story is really good at the moment with a lot of cool factors coming in.

My only thing however is that whenever yo do a transition, I think it would be best to state which point of view it is. It got a little confusing at who I should be focusing on a few times.

My final thing is a question. Are you still accepting OC's, cause I have a really cool Idea for an OC that isn't a type-S.

Hello! I was your fan once upon a time, and I still am! We had some form of contact once but I lost my fanfiction account username and password somewhere along the line. Anyways, I love your story; intense plotline and mysteeeerious strangers (yes I love those).
Yes, I'm rooting for you the whole way!

Hey Fiamma, sorry it took me ages to drop in and review this. I've been busy with work and getting ready to drop off grid for the next month. Let's get down to business with your chapter here! So this appears to be a pretty bad guy centric chapter that includes the new character for the good guys, Kate Argasen. Crowley is definitely a guy that likes to toy with his enemy by taunting them and demeaning them like he did with Kate as he chased her down and was condescending to her about being a pathetic Fire-type.

Then it takes us to a dream/flashback of Michka's about her and Lucas. Childhood friend and lover it would appear to be. I'm curious as to who Lucas is though. Is it the Lucas from the games or is he just an OC you made? Either way, we get a glimpse about Michka's past and this love interest of hers from when she was younger that I have a hunch will come back later in the story in some shape or form. Rein and Michka also share a brief comedic moment as they are standing at the mouth of the cave. It seems as though they're trying to get along, although Rein's vulgar attitude is still present with her dropping the mother of all curse words again, but then again that's because she hasn't had any form of parental discipline in her life.

So we see that Michka plans to split from the group ASAP and is more of a lone wolf than a team player. Now this makes me wonder if that's truly what she is like or if she just doesn't want to drag her acquaintances deeper into the things that have happened to her already. Before she can do that, she and Dameon can sense the distress coming from Eterna Forrest where Crowley is attacking Kate. Sure enough both Dameon and Michka leave to intercept Crowley and help Kate, but Michka being impatient leaves Dameon behind any hope for possible back up. So Michka swoops in and manages to locate Kate to protect her with some of her Pokémon that made their debut being Terran the Rhyperior and Arcanine.

One thing I'm curious to know is how far Dameon and Michka went because suddenly Rein got there to help them towards the end of the chapter. So Rein believes she scared them off, yet she's ignorant of the true reason as to why, which is another comedic factor. So now we are introduced to another new OC on top of Kate, being Guardian. I wonder what happened to Dameon though. That's kind of weird that he was with Michka, but he somehow can't locate her when he gets to the ground to give her backup. Unless he went to attend to another matter that'll be explained later, because as a leader, that's not something he should have done since he left his friends to fend for themselves instead of helping them. Guess we'll have to wait and see.

I'm curious to know about Guardian and Kate's history that will most likely be covered in another later chapter that may be posted while I'm off grid, so I'll just have to wait and see. Keep up the good work, Fiamma. Congratulations on the one year anniversary for your story and I hope you did end up getting that job you were telling me about. Since I will be gone through July, I thought now would be the best time to wish you a happy 19th birthday. Hope you have a good one!

-CaptainPrice

Good chapter, we've learned a little of Michka's past, but I am still curious to see who Lucas is and how Michka got from there to being chased by Crowley. And Guardian seems very mysterious, I can't wait to learn more about him and Kate.

I would like to say that I'm loving the story so far, and that I hope life smooths out a bit more so I can see just what happens next. I've honestly haven't been this excited since I had to wait for the pilot episode of Pokemon, so keep up the good work, though take your time please!

HEY! everyone loves Bug-type... come on! I mean, I kinda hope I'm the only Bug-type but that ain't the point.. aha, anyways, good going man :D

Great chapter! And you did a great job with Kate! Can't wait. to read more!

To be completely honest, I cannot wait for the next chapter, and I have no idea who this mystery man is. I'm going to be bubbling in suspense till I find out, so please hurry with the next chapter :D

Wow. Amazing chapter! Haha, Rein. xD You're still continuously getting her personality pretty much perfect and I commend you for that ;) Not many people I know can get her personality perfectly. Some people make her way too serious, when she's more of a funny character, and then some make her way too bitchy. xD You got her just right! Anyway, I love the other characters so far. You are definitely right, not good to have two feisty girls in one area together xD Kenta's adorable And the evil characters are amusing too xD Well, to me anyway.

I think that's all I have to say for now :D Sorry for the late review, btw. You are doing amazing and I hope you update soon! :)