Oh my goodness. I don't understand why or how low the reviews and favourite are... this is by far one of the most amazing sasusaku fanfiction I've ever read! Thank you so much for completing it! This was such a beautiful ending!

This was a great story! Glad to have read it!

My god I fell in love with this story the only time I quit reading it was when I had to make dinner but after that I couldn't put it down for nothing. I have always loved when people made the girls who were kind of weak out to be bad asses it amazes me your story was amazing. I have read many stories with Sakura and it's just that so far yours was the best that I have read. I apologize for not putting that in better wording.

LOVED IT!

What does koi mean? Or is it just an affectionet term? I like your story so far. It's really good.

That was a great first chapter :) excited to read more :)

So I'm a reader who read the full story except I skipped the M rated parts. I think people would appreciate a short sequel with the next kid :D
Oh and the story of how the kids were strong bla bla bla xD

Awe...

I love your story

Do A Sequel Please! This Was Such A Great Story! 3 Ü

I'm pretty sure it's just because I'm dumb, but I'm finding this story very hard to follow D:

Good story though I feel that it is lacking in detail. It looks like a first edit. But that is if you are going for really good quality. It's at this stage that I would go back and go through every single sentence and beef it out until it feels real. Though, I have not read your other chapters and writers often get a lot better throughout!
If you are choosing past tense to write in you should stick to that. I have noticed a bit of variance from past to present as well as fragmented sentences that could be worded out better and typos, punctuation etc. If you notice many novelists write in first sentence for example - 'From his place on the forest floor Kakashi can see that the young girl is just shy of academy age. Her large viridian eyes peering out at him from her spot behind a moderately sized tree trunk.
Great plot, good characterisation for the setting and solid frame work.' An example of present tense. It took a loooong time for me to get out of past tense habit. I chose present tense but many choose past as long as it is consistent.
If you aren't using a novella/story structure I would suggest looking at a heroes journey through google. It's a structure for the entire piece of writing whether it be a short story or multi chapter.
Good luck with your writing :) The only reason I have said all this is because I get the feeling you are quite interested in writing and alot of people don't give feed back worth anything. I have been putting pen to paper since is was 12 and am now writing my own novel at age 22 XP So anything can happen with enough practice.
Great Sakura too! :D
Do you have a beta :

I did not really understand what you ment by '"for it was the last time he could have ever watched her fall."' I thought you ment she was going to die or be crippled but other than that I liked it

sasuke breaking down was really sad, but what got me was when the baby reached his hand out for him and smiled, oh man, making me cry!

Aww so sad am I was like dang is Sakura going to die again? But then I was like I she just I a coma